EesomeBeastie
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I just had my first story posted on the Literotica site. As someone who has never written fiction before (mainly rather dry technical notes at work) I wanted someone provide some in-depth criticism first, and tried the volunteer editor list. Three deafening silences, one agreement followed by a silence, and so I just submitted it anyway (I was up against time pressure to get it into the Valentine's Day competition).
The story is called "Listening In" and it's at:
http://www.literotica.com/stories/sh....php?id=405407
It's about a chap who forges a Valentine's card from one colleague to another, to stir things up a bit, but discovers that it's led them to get together, and on the spur of the moment he bugs their planned encounter and listens in on the action.
Now I want to improve my writing. I tried posting a request for detailed feedback on the story feedback forum and got a couple of good replies:
http://forum.literotica.com/showthread.php?t=638925
One of the replies suggested I ask here for an editor. So here I am.
I'd like someone willing to give fairly detailed suggestions on the story linked to above, and also on a follow-up which includes spanking and very mild bondage. I hope to write a series of stories with different encounters exploring different themes, but nothing particularly dark or strong, and definitely no incest stories. So if you prefer strong fetish or BDSM stories then I'm afraid that my writing will never be for you.
Nationality not important as long as you are willing to live with UK spellings in my writing, not US.
Is it normal to have just one editor commenting on a story? I was thinking I'd like separate male and female viewpoints, if that's not being greedy.
The story is called "Listening In" and it's at:
http://www.literotica.com/stories/sh....php?id=405407
It's about a chap who forges a Valentine's card from one colleague to another, to stir things up a bit, but discovers that it's led them to get together, and on the spur of the moment he bugs their planned encounter and listens in on the action.
Now I want to improve my writing. I tried posting a request for detailed feedback on the story feedback forum and got a couple of good replies:
http://forum.literotica.com/showthread.php?t=638925
One of the replies suggested I ask here for an editor. So here I am.
I'd like someone willing to give fairly detailed suggestions on the story linked to above, and also on a follow-up which includes spanking and very mild bondage. I hope to write a series of stories with different encounters exploring different themes, but nothing particularly dark or strong, and definitely no incest stories. So if you prefer strong fetish or BDSM stories then I'm afraid that my writing will never be for you.
Nationality not important as long as you are willing to live with UK spellings in my writing, not US.
Is it normal to have just one editor commenting on a story? I was thinking I'd like separate male and female viewpoints, if that's not being greedy.
