Editor for Romance gig?

[drunkenphilosophy]

I'm relatively (?) new over here at Lit, and I've posted a few chapters under Romance already. Trouble is I haven't actually got an editor and I do feel that I desperately need one. I did try the Lit Editor program, but haven't received a single reply so far.

I've just completed the latest chapter and would really appreciate if anyone out there would be willing to critique not just the current piece but the others as well - there is no denying that a second (or third, fourth and fifth) opinion would provide plenty of insight towards the flaws and basic structure of the story.
Feedback in any way is most welcome. There's a lot of room for improvement, and I'd love for a pointer or two.

Or a hundred. Heh.

My submissions can be found at http://www.literotica.com/stories/me...ge=submissions

 

[snoopercharmbrights]

You might get a better response if you specify the length of each chapter (in words) and how many more chapters you envisage as these factors play a large part in a volunteer editor's decision whether to offer help.

Incidentally your stories are at http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=1361154&page=submissions; the link you cited does not work.