"Easter Eggs" (Brother-Sister Consentual Incest, Seduction, Impregnation.)

[hellsgate]

Hi There,
Just looking for opinions / constructive criticisms on my story - "Easter Eggs". I'm trying to avoid the lazy-author "slut sister" / "studly brother" stereotypes but make it seem like the characters are the kind you'd have a reasonable chance with in real life, while making the plot & love-making descriptive and generally hot enough. It's set-up in Microsoft Word, so be warned you need ~that~ to be able to read it.

Here's the link:


http://f1.grp.yahoofs.com/v1/ACOFSJ...ason K.S. Hauck/Personal_Files/EasterEggs.doc

 

[The_Fractal_King]

You really should post the story here if you want a response from us. Otherwise you're taking up the Admin's bandwith to advertise for someone else which is rude at the absolute minimum. On the upside Incest is a popular category on Literotica and you will probably get a good deal of feedback if you do post it here.

edit: link doesn't work btw

 

[tickledkitty]

Lactating is a womanly art? I thought it was a means to feed infants.

I felt a lot of things while I was doing it. Artsy wasn't one of them.

 

[elfin_odalisque]

hellsgate, hi,

You are a member, so why not post your story here. Despite the site being 'free' to writers, the economics of the web means you have to give to receive.

Post Easter Eggs as a story or in the forum and we'll all jump to give you our two cents. Don't abuse the system.

I get a 404 when I try to click on your story and I think TickledK is unfair when she makes any comment on stuff that's not posted on Lit.

 

[The_Fractal_King]

I think TickledK is unfair when she makes any comment on stuff that's not posted on Lit.

The "Erotic Womanly Art Of Lactating" line is in his signature and thus on Lit.

 

[cyberneticghost]

Lactating is a womanly art? I thought it was a means to feed infants.

I felt a lot of things while I was doing it. Artsy wasn't one of them.

This made me laugh pretty hard.

 

[elfin_odalisque]

The "Erotic Womanly Art Of Lactating" line is in his signature and thus on Lit.

Fractal, I bow to your omniscience. Thanks.

I just wish I could read it. As someone who hopes to be lactating somewhere in the dim and distant future, I share TK's view that I struggle to see the erotic side of feeding babies. Then SO peered over my shoulder and almost embarrassed himself.

What is this thing with guys and feeding mothers?

There's so much interest, please post the story and let's see where our hormones take us.

 

[hellsgate]

Here, try this. I just deleted the old unedited copy of "Part 1" & replaced it with the edited (with graphics,) version. I hope to get the rest done by this weekend or next weekend.

http://www.geocities.com/trekwriter31/EasterEggs.doc

 

[tickledkitty]

Here, try this. I just deleted the old unedited copy of "Part 1" & replaced it with the edited (with graphics,) version. I hope to get the rest done by this weekend or next weekend.

http://www.geocities.com/trekwriter31/EasterEggs.doc

Um...you're still not getting it. You need to submit the story to Lit before we will critique it. This forum is for Literotica authors.

 

[tickledkitty]

Fractal, I bow to your omniscience. Thanks.

I just wish I could read it. As someone who hopes to be lactating somewhere in the dim and distant future, I share TK's view that I struggle to see the erotic side of feeding babies. Then SO peered over my shoulder and almost embarrassed himself.

What is this thing with guys and feeding mothers?

There's so much interest, please post the story and let's see where our hormones take us.

elfin, I don't think the story is about lactating. He's got a blurb in his sig about it. I sure as hell wouldn't read about lactation from this particular source either. He's getting off on it. I'm sure there are thousands of books available on the subject that deal with the practical educational aspects of it.

 

[hellsgate]

Story has been submitted through normal channels.

Status: Pending

 

[The_Fractal_King]

What is this thing with guys and feeding mothers?

It's probably evolutionary. A woman who is lactating generally has a child (and larger breasts ) and is probably healthy, at the very least a steady diet is required for nursing. Sucking reflexes are also tied to comfort and I'm sure Freud would have had plenty to say about the causes. Also, it's totally hot.