Drip and Squish

[WickedEve]

No, this isn't about my sex life.

Are there words that you dislike seeing in a poem? I was commenting on a poem on another board. The poem contained the words maggots and flies. Of course, the poet was talking about the belly and eyes of a dead bear, so those unappealing words fit.

But how about erotic poetry with drip, dripping, drippy? Squish? "Her womanhood oozed with my slimy love." In the past few years, I've read similar here at Lit. Of course, all words can work perfectly fine in the right poem. I still don't like drip, squish and maggot.

I also wonder about clowns with cotton candy in the middle of a serious poem about how God created mountains and seas. Or a erotic poem with breathtaking imagery that suddenly flings at the reader a "I'll roll over like a puppy for you" line.

Tell me which words bug you, so I don't end up thinking it's just me and my squishy weirdness.

 

[Guest]

While I think about that what in blazes is going on in your AV?

 

[WickedEve]

While I think about that what in blazes is going on in your AV?

I don't remember now. That was couple of years ago.
So, how do you feel about the word blazes?

 

[sandspike]

I know what you're saying Dr.

I'll call you Doc. since I can tell from your av that you do self exams. The words
you are writing about are for stories not poetry. One thing you and several other
poets have taught me is word usage. Use less but newer words. Leave the
everyday day words for Hemingway or some guy called 'bone me brother'. Smut
won't produce a 5 poem, not like a dictionary.

 

[bluerains]

tis so easy eve

to find jerry springer gutter snipe language..but its very hard to come up with such awesome twists of words and erotic thinking you inspire...thats what bugs me...the gutter trash language to explain the beauty of sexual bliss...its a demeaning...demoralizing and dominion male insecure thing..because they want to make the woman less than themselves....when we are in fact.. love...immortal...thanks eve for bringing up this subject of demeaning language to touch a subject of greatness....be blessed/blue

 

[WickedEve]

I'll call you Doc. since I can tell from your av that you do self exams. The words
you are writing about are for stories not poetry. One thing you and several other
poets have taught me is word usage. Use less but newer words. Leave the
everyday day words for Hemingway or some guy called 'bone me brother'. Smut
won't produce a 5 poem, not like a dictionary.

Sigh... I'm on my bed with my camera and I'm wearing white panties. End of story. lol
But yes, word choice is a big deal. I may change one word several times before I find the right one. And I always use an online thesaurus.

Main Entry: drip
Part of Speech: verb
Definition: trickle
Synonyms: dribble, drizzle, drop, exude, filter, plop, rain, splash, sprinkle, trill, weep

 

[WickedEve]

to find jerry springer gutter snipe language..but its very hard to come up with such awesome twists of words and erotic thinking you inspire...thats what bugs me...the gutter trash language to explain the beauty of sexual bliss...its a demeaning...demoralizing and dominion male insecure thing..because they want to make the woman less than themselves....when we are in fact.. love...immortal...thanks eve for bringing up this subject of demeaning language to touch a subject of greatness....be blessed/blue

There are some words that detract from a poem not because they are demeaning, but because some of them are ridiculous in a poem. I've read "erotica" with drips and drooling and oozing and... lol well, it gets messy.

 

[flyguy69]

How about "dribble"?

How about "lickety"?

How about "bubbling"?

A friend of mine used all of those words in his poetry, so I was just wondering, you know.

 

[PatCarrington]

I don't remember now. That was couple of years ago.
So, how do you feel about the word blazes?

i like blazes.

i kinda like drip too, sometimes. depends how it's used. it sounds better than plop

we do drip, don't we? ...........and not only in the gutter.

(is this too messy, eve?)

 

[WickedEve]

How about "dribble"?

How about "lickety"?

How about "bubbling"?

A friend of mine used all of those words in his poetry, so I was just wondering, you know.

Dribbling honey... yeah, okay. But you must use caution with dribbling in an erotic poem--or use a towel.
I read an erotic story about 5 years ago that was heavy on the flicking. There were paragraphs dedicated to it. "He flicked her clit with this tongue. Flick... flick... flick..." Two paragraphs later: "flick, flick... flick, flick, flick, flick... flick." So, no flicking flicks in a flicking poem.

 

[Trent_Dutch]

I don't like anything too lewd or crass in an erotic poem, unless its going for a humour. Swear words are a 'no-no' too, for me, personally. Any references to throbbing man hoods/writhing/pussies/nuzzling between thighs/two people being entwined etc. are also a bit cliched and generic to me.... Im actually working on a poem currently about cliche and rhetoric in erotic poetry, using Karl Kraus's attacks on the metaphor and rhetoric that mislead our view of reality and its parallel to Witgensteins linguistic preoccupations...

It really upsets me when I come round to do my reviews and read X number of erotic poems that really miss the spot.

In the end though Im sure that within the right context any word can be used in any poem.... using certain words will change a poem, change its credibility and the image it is trying to communicate. But sometimes a change of perspective is whats needed for a poem... intentions can change and poetry can evolve. Saying that though, any poem that I come across with the phrase 'man paste' or 'globulous bosoms' will probably get closed pretty quickly.

 

[WickedEve]

i like blazes.

i kinda like drip too, sometimes. depends how it's used. it sounds better than plop

we do drip, don't we? ...........and not only in the gutter.

(is this too messy, eve?)

plop? That's nasty. No good can come out of a plop.

 

[PatCarrington]

..because they want to make the woman less than themselves....

i don't think most men want to do that.

i count my blessings every day.

 

[bluerains]

There are some words that detract from a poem not because they are demeaning, but because some of them are ridiculous in a poem. I've read "erotica" with drips and drooling and oozing and... lol well, it gets messy.

as I..and sometimes a word such a cock...is a good thing...I used it in a recent pen...because I wanted to make it a temple to be loved and blessed ...and the word suited me...but..when language is such as to offend someone...you are right on...blue

 

[PatCarrington]

plop? That's nasty. No good can come out of a plop.

unless you're doing something unusual.

like.....umm....writing about a sock puppet slouched in a chair watching Springer while you decide not to darn his head....

....or something like that. plop could probably fit there.

 

[Trent_Dutch]

because they want to make the woman less than themselves....

I wouldn't wish that on anyone....

 

[WickedEve]

I don't like anything too lewd or crass in an erotic poem, unless its going for a humour. Swear words are a 'no-no' too, for me, personally. Any references to throbbing man hoods/writhing/pussies/nuzzling between thighs/two people being entwined etc. are also a bit cliched and generic to me.... Im actually working on a poem currently about cliche and rhetoric in erotic poetry, using Karl Kraus's attacks on the metaphor and rhetoric that mislead our view of reality and its parallel to Witgensteins linguistic preoccupations...

It really upsets me when I come round to do my reviews and read X number of erotic poems that really miss the spot.

In the end though Im sure that within the right context any word can be used in any poem.... using certain words will change a poem, change its credibility and the image it is trying to communicate. But sometimes a change of perspective is whats needed for a poem... intentions can change and poetry can evolve. Saying that though, any poem that I come across with the phrase 'man paste' or 'globulous bosoms' will probably get closed pretty quickly.

Man paste is new one for me. It's funny. lol I have entwined, though.
I think the majority of erotic poems at literotica are either pornographic or juvenile. To write a truly erotic poem takes more effort than telling the reader there is passion and fire. I think I'd rather read about dripping and paste than another burning love fire.

 

[WickedEve]

unless you're doing something unusual.

like.....umm....writing about a sock puppet slouched in a chair watching Springer while you decide not to darn his head....

....or something like that. plop could probably fit there.

Oh god... that poem is still around? It's an old poem. I was insane when I wrote it! More insane than I am now.

 

[PatCarrington]

In the end though Im sure that within the right context any word can be used in any poem....

that is on the money.

 

[PatCarrington]

Oh god... that poem is still around? It's an old poem. I was insane when I wrote it! More insane than I am now.

i love it. it scares me.

i think you used slouch....but plop could have had a place.

all words have a place. finding the place is the key.

 

[Trent_Dutch]

Man paste is new one for me. It's funny. lol I have entwined, though.
I think the majority of erotic poems at literotica are either pornographic or juvenile. To write a truly erotic poem takes more effort than telling the reader there is passion and fire. I think I'd rather read about dripping and paste than another burning love fire.

Ooohh Dripping man paste... I never saw that. I just read back through an old poem and realised I entwined once aswell... It was at the end of the poem and I was struggling a little... the ending was quite limp.

I agree that alot of the erotic poetry is juvenile/pornographic... the erotic line is a very difficult one to find, truly erotic poetry is tough to write... without becoming too crass or too vague or too esoteric.... thats why I don't really touch it any more... I tried to write a few, but they never seem to work. I think its because it has to be tastefully written, but the subject matter is usually far from tasteful.

 

[twelveoone]

No, this isn't about my sex life.

Are there words that you dislike seeing in a poem? I was commenting on a poem on another board. The poem contained the words maggots and flies. Of course, the poet was talking about the belly and eyes of a dead bear, so those unappealing words fit.

But how about erotic poetry with drip, dripping, drippy? Squish? "Her womanhood oozed with my slimy love." In the past few years, I've read similar here at Lit. Of course, all words can work perfectly fine in the right poem. I still don't like drip, squish and maggot.

I also wonder about clowns with cotton candy in the middle of a serious poem about how God created mountains and seas. Or a erotic poem with breathtaking imagery that suddenly flings at the reader a "I'll roll over like a puppy for you" line.

Tell me which words bug you, so I don't end up thinking it's just me and my squishy weirdness.

What in the hell are you talking about, you don't like the word drip?
Squish, well nobody over the age of ten should use THAT word.
OR are you refering to just erotic,
well maggot definitly is a turn-off. I do hope nobody submitted one of those.

 

[bluerains]

ahhh yes!!

Man paste is new one for me. It's funny. lol I have entwined, though.
I think the majority of erotic poems at literotica are either pornographic or juvenile. To write a truly erotic poem takes more effort than telling the reader there is passion and fire. I think I'd rather read about dripping and paste than another burning love fire.

true erotism crawls thru the skin in blue bolts and mesmerizes the mind with core light beauty...and many on this site do just that...I am humbled at times of the wonderful work of such poets..blue

 

[flyguy69]

....These are the orgasms

of poetry, wherein the f-word, the c-word,
the h-word, the p-word, the l-word
and even the q-word all get used
until the entire alphabet drawer, with its neat
rows of little shaker jars, gets sprinkled
into the bubbling pot of a poem. ....

from Sex Poem

 

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