Does this work, its a rewrite

[Bestsuckit]

Wife Forced Me To Suck Cock


by Dejected Husband


>>>Modified<<<<<<<

 

[Bestsuckit]

Modified to avoid moderator protests!!! I blame private school for my inability to write!!

 

[TheWritingGroup]

This is going to get deleted. You aren't allowed to post entire stories in the forum.

--Annie

 

[PennyThompson]

You need to slow down, take your time, and stop typing one-handed

Your writing is very stream-of-consciousness, which makes it difficult to follow at times.

Your use of dialog punctuation is chaotic, and is almost certainly going to get your story sent back with a note telling you to find an editor and fix your structure.

You've obviously got a story here that excites you, but you need to have a little more patience with your writing craft or you'll have a hard time exciting anyone else

 

[lovecraft68]

I feel like this would be a better read if I was drinking.

A+ for enthusiasm, but you need to pace yourself, this is like a letter to penthouse written by someone who did some crank.

Like someone already said, this will end up deleted because you are only allowed a paragraph or two of a story in a forum.

Which is kind of odd seeing this is a free story site, but guess they want them to stay on story side of things

 

[Bestsuckit]

OK thanks I was thinking some sort of AI might help. My writing style is horrible, I have no sentence structure. I know that. Let me work on it. Thanks for the input.

 

[PennyThompson]

I was thinking some sort of AI might help

Eek don't do that, using writing AI is also against the publishing rules and your story will definitely get rejected.

Writing isn't hard, it just takes patience! There are volunteer editors available here that can help you polish, but you'll need to tidy it up a lot more before someone will want to assist.

 

[Sammael Bard]

Use the Editor's Forum if you need a beta-reader/editor.