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[Guest]

Ask impressive. She'd written dialogue stories.

 

[neonlyte]

First off nothing wrong with all dialogue story.

An all dialogue sex story might take some swallowing. Consider what's involved in sex, it's not just about what F is doing to M and visa-versa, it's also about mood, ambience, sight, sound, smell, texture - all significantly easier to describe in narrative than through dialogue.

It's easier to write as a single persons 'thoughts' of what is taking place. I did something similar myself last year, The Blow Job, link here if you want to take a look.
Not immensely well received largely because it's too focussed on a single person in a two person act. That's the drawback.

You should have a go, test your boundaries, add a note specifically requesting feedback on the way the story is written - this does improve the odds of getting comments.

I'd be pleased to take a look, if your so inclined.

 

[Weird Harold]

Anybody experimented with this sort of thing, and how did it go?

I've done an experimental all dialogue story -- it's not currently posted anywhere on the web, but I'll send a copy to anyone who PMs me their e-mail address.

The story is not currently posted anywhere because it failed to meet the minimum score for retention at the site where it was posted -- it scored a dismal 5.something out of a possible ten.

I don't know for sure whether the problem was the style or the content, but the all dialogue style certainly didn't help the score much.

I do know that I don't consider it worth posting at Literotica because it's just not a very good story -- because of the all dialogue style. The all dialogue style simply makes presenting any real feelings or texture in the story, IMHO.

 

[brightlyiburn]

This has already been mentioned in another place but I'm still interested in the wise cousel one can always find here.
Been working on an idea, a short piece that is all dialogue.
For one thing I see that as if the treatment of the orgasm is not challenging enough, getting it across with dialogue seems to be even more tricky, but I still want to try it.
The original version showed the words of both characters, but then I wondered if it might be even better with just one character's dialogue and the other implied or something.
I've gotten one encouraging green light on the basic story. This encourager also said it works well as dialogue without the quotation marks.
Anybody experimented with this sort of thing, and how did it go?
Thanks.

This is something incredibly difficult to do. With only dialogue, it's harder to pull in readers. You may want to add just a bit of detail implying perhaps that someone is talking to a friend on a telephone or something. Even if it's something written into the dialogue. And keep in mind that it's going to be terribly difficult for readers to adjust to, so don't feel discouraged if you get some bad response.

 

[Colleen Thomas]

You have to have an absolute talent with dialogue to do a story that is all dialogue. Even then, you will loose a lot of readers, simply because the style isn't one they are going to be familiar with. I don't have much talent with dialogue and work to limit how much I have to include in a story. I can't imagine a story with no description, beyond that delivered in dialogue.

I wish you luck with it, but hope you have a thick skin. The slings and barbs are likely to come in droves.

 

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[impressive]

Ask impressive. She'd written dialogue stories.

I have 3 in my "conversations with a muse" series. Click the "impressions" link in my sig. They are entitled: "A-Musement ," "Be-Musing," and "Muse-ical Chair." Each is short (1 Lit page).

They were fun to write & I think they came off well.

Good luck!

EDITED: Links added.

 

[matriarch]

I have 3 in my "conversations with a muse" series. Click the "impressions" link in my sig. They are entitled: "A-Musement ," "Be-Musing," and "Muse-ical Chair." Each is short (1 Lit page).

They were fun to write & I think they came off well.

Good luck!

EDITED: Links added.

They came off more than well.......I personally thought them excellent and extremely sexy pieces of work.

One would have to go a long way to better those as reference points.

 

[LadyJeanne]

They came off more than well.......I personally thought them excellent and extremely sexy pieces of work.

One would have to go a long way to better those as reference points.

Ditto!

 

[impressive]

They came off more than well.......I personally thought them excellent and extremely sexy pieces of work.

One would have to go a long way to better those as reference points.

Thanks!

Ditto!

Ditto!

 

[Guest]

My Literotica Olympics: Day 22 was almost entirely dialogue. I did it without using 'he said', 'she said'. Relying on the next speaker to identify the previous. I think I did a fair job with it, there aren't too many places for you to get lost. But then each character has some distinct identifying traits in the way they speak. And the story was written from the viewpoint of the game anouncers describing the event, which I think gives it more of an Olympic broadcast feel to it.

But that story was more comedy than erotica. It would be difficult, at best to write an erotic tale using dialogue only. On the other hand a story without any dialogue is missing a lot.

Give it a shot. you never know how it will turn out until you do it. You may prove it to be a viable style. Or you may see that it needs something to connect the dialogue to the story.

 

[impressive]

It would be difficult, at best to write an erotic tale using dialogue only.

Perhaps -- but it was FUN!

 

[Awful Arthur]

One of my first efforts, that I never posted, was an all dialogue experiment.

The story had a pretty complex plot as erotic stroies go and I figured just telling the story would be my biggest problem. That, however, turned out to be the easy part. I was surprised at just how easy it was.

Keeping the reader from becoming confused as to who was talking didn't seem to be a problem either.

What turned out to be the major problem for me was the sex. The sex scenes were fairly intense and I never found a satisfactory way to communicate the sounds. Just to get through the first draft, I resorted to using the old god-awful, "UUUUNNNNNGGGG OOOOHHH AAAHHHHH EEEEEE IIIIIIIII," and of course, "I'MMM CCCOOOOMMMMIIIIINNNNNGGGGGGG!!!!"

AA

 

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[Awful Arthur]

That is a tricky one, isn't it?

"Dear, this seems an appropriate moment to discuss these orgasms that are fast approaching."
"Yes, I'm feeling quite nice just now. You? Indescribable intensity. Oh I could just explode about now."
"Oh yes, and me too. The orgasm feels much closer than it did."
Guess that doesn't quite work either.

 

[dr_mabeuse]

No matter how good it is, an all-dialogue story will never be anything more than a stunt, like those stories that are written without using the letter "e".

It's hard to think of a situation where that would be the best way to tell a story.

 

[Weird Harold]

It's hard to think of a situation where that would be the best way to tell a story.

This is true.

It occurs to me that telling a story entirely in dialogue is like telliing a story about someone telling a story.

 

[impressive]

This is true.

It occurs to me that telling a story entirely in dialogue is like telliing a story about someone telling a story.

*sigh* You people! Instead of bitching about how difficult/impossible/corny-carny it would be, you're supposed to take the advice above and check out MINE! Then, you're supposed to come back here and say it was brilliant. Sheesh!

 

[NoJo]

*sigh* You people! Instead of bitching about how difficult/impossible/corny-carny it would be, you're supposed to take the advice above and check out MINE! Then, you're supposed to come back here and say it was brilliant. Sheesh!

I'm going to say "it was brilliant. Sheesh! " and then read your story later, if that's okay with you, imp.

 

[NoJo]

No matter how good it is, an all-dialogue story will never be anything more than a stunt, like those stories that are written without using the letter "e".

It's hard to think of a situation where that would be the best way to tell a story.

I agr.

 

[impressive]

I'm going to say "it was brilliant. Sheesh! " and then read your story later, if that's okay with you, imp.

Whatever works for you, babe. As long as you sound like a Guinness commercial, we'll be fine!

 

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[NoJo]

Seem to recall some guy called Plato who wrote in dialogue.
True, he wasn't trying to tell erotic stories on an internet site.
I know it is difficult.
I will expect this attempt to be a total flop and if by some fluke it measures even a millionth of a millimeter above the flop line then I will be pleasantly surprised. Work on Real Stories in the meantime.
Just ideas, you know.
A guy just gets ideas and tries them out.
That's all.
You're all very sweet.

And you have a lovely stamen, hmmnmm.

 

[Guest]

I agr.

You made me laugh out loud you fucking wit. P.