details about a massage

[jeninflorida]

I’m not sure if this is the best forum to post a question like this as I'm working on the story.

When you read an erotic story what type of details do you want? Does the conversation have to be very detailed or can some things be skipped (like introductions and stuff, so that the story gets moving into the good parts)?

The story that I’m currently working on is about going to get a massage and the girl at the spa greets me. I’m planning on skipping the detailed conversations and just keep things to a minimum so that the story can quickly move to sexy massage. Once the massage starts the I go into details about the massage, the feelings and sensations, and the thoughts about being exposed to this hottie.

Does that make any sense?

 

[Totzman]

When I write stories like this I usually do one of two things:

The first is that I might skip over it. I would do this by simply writing a short sentence paraphrasing what occurs between the beginning of the story and the good parts. Simple as that. I actually like to avoid this though, because I feel good writing should have an even pace. A reader should never feel as though the author is paraphrasing something; they should always feel as though they are getting a full story that flows smoothly.

That's why I prefer the second method. This is a little harder to do, but what I do is try to make the transitional period as interesting as possible. Find a way to make the dialogue engaging; make it a sort of foreplay for the reader, as a hint of things to come. Use double entendres, talk about the thoughts going through your head or her head as you prepare to get to the meat of the story. I've found if you are able to make the entire story fun to read readers will enjoy it more than if you just skip over parts you don't find interesting. Readers will appreciate the extra effort.

If this just isn't possible, or you simply find a particular story doesn't suit itself to this method, go with method one, or keep the transitional part of the story brief and to the point.

 

[HeyAll]

I think at the very minimum, it should start off with some dialogue to start things off.

Perhaps it could be with things like "have you been coming here long?" and small talk like that.

Or something where you talk tell her about what stressful week you've had and you need to release some tension, and she replies that she knows just the thing.

 

[sirhugs]

I'm a dialogue whore (or slut, I don't get paid for it), but you can elide the boring parts, eg by saying "we all introduced ourselves, our nervousness provoking a few giggles and tentative grins, even as our eyes checked out bodies"

 

[ProfessorTA]

I do like dialogue as well but agree with others that there is some description that can be skipped like how they are looking at each other or the immediate surrounding and how it makes them feel. Quick and witty dialogue is great if you can do it before getting to the fun stuff of you playing with the hottie which should be extremely detailed of course.

 

[Carnevil9]

I always like to start at the juicy parts, to engage the reader. If necessary, I'll do a "flashback" later to explain how we got there. But you GOTTA start the story in the middle of the Good Stuff.

 

[StrongMaster7]

Here are some details from a few massages I have gotten.

Sat in steam room in a towel before a shower and massage. The Asian girl came in and rubbed my shoulders and my crotch through the towel. A promise of the happy ending to come.

One massage used mineral oil and then rubbing alcohol on a warm washcloth, area by area.

I enjoyed the very gradual move of hands up my legs to my buttocks. The touch was so slight as to be accidental. She knew she was driving me crazy. Eventually she had me begging for a finger up my ass.

Many of the ladies have let me touch their buttocks as they massaged me.

The first massage I got was in Colorado Springs. The cute, quiet Asian gal did a slow, careful awesome job on me. She "didn't have change" for the twenty I wanted to give her half of. Her boss, another tiny, cute Asian gal in a sexy bikini/scarf outfit came out and talked nice to me until I told her to keep the change.


I hope these bits and pieces are useful to you. Getting a massage was a regular thing for me a long time ago. It was more exciting than a topless club because it was an individual experience. It was also illegal. But it was safe sex.

 

[MagicFingers]

Not too much introductions

I believe you MUST introduce the characters in order to make the story interesting. Otherwise they will all be the same and that's boring. I mean YOU, the writer, introducing them, in any way you choose. Could be narative or dialogue. And it doesn't have to be all at once. More development later is often appropriate. But if you spend too much time with background and character development, the reader will get bored and exit or skip it to see if it's worth reading any more.

We are like kids, with short attention spans. We read these stories to be stimulated and if there's nothing to paint a mental picture, it's like reading about stick figures. Some stories I've read here have two Lit pages of build up and never seem to get to what the story is about. Avoid that. I rarely start with dialogue because it's too hard to figure out WHO these people are, but that's just me.

How does that go? Tell 'em what you're going to tell them
Tell them
Tell 'em what you told them.

Hope this helps. I fell smart and helpful today. LOL