Desert Vision 1-3

[Sal]

Well now that the entire story is posted ( great pics on that last part huh?...Thanks Miranda-even though I dont know her::grins:

Is there any comment out there on it, the setting, the topic, whatever?? Would love to hear about your thoughts
Sal

 

[English Bob]

Just finished reading your story Sal. I found that as soon as i had finished part 1 i had to start on the second part right away. Totally cracking read!! Keep up the good work and the very different style - EB

 

[Miranda]

You know what I think, Sal. ::wink.::

 

[Bs]

Well here goes, since you asked. I read the first installment. Liked everything about it, the setting, the characters, and the style by which it was written.

Havent read 2 proably won't, heres why:

My wife wanted me to read her one of the stories last night. I went to the new section, picked that one because Laurel had mention that it was up in one of her posts and she thought it was really good. (something about almost making her cry?)So, I read it to my wife, or started to got thru page one and somewhere in page 2. She lost all intrest and told me I did'nt need to read any more. This was very disapointing to me, but I wanted to know what was wrong? She thought the discriptions of the Indian girls eyes and her skin tone, as well as his, were over done. 1st time great. Twice is nice. 3rd time overkill. And, pulling in descriptions using word from nowhere like "purchase" to describe his manhood? (this maybe inccorect in what it was describing, but the word seemed out of place) There were other over discriptive words. And I'm not going to go back and re-read it just to be accurate. That said I'll have to agree with her. She (We) just plain lost intrest. Too wordy. (just like this post)

I thought the pictures were great! Very erotic!

Now before everyone jumps on my case! He asked what we thought! And I thought he was trying to hard!

So remember:
Opinions are like assholes,
Everyone has one
And they all stink!

 

[Guest]

No No thank you BS for your candor. To you it was wordy..but why didnt you read part one to your wife? Two and three IMHO dont stand alone well enough. But please go back and read two and tell me if you found that failing as well. To the other two posters thank you as well especially Miranda.(Who I really dont know at all uhh uhh and thats my story!)Any other comments feel free I have big shoulders I can take it
Sal

 

[Sal]

Well B S ?? I've anxiously been awaiting your opinion of part II ( and hopefully your ladie's as well) How about a little feedback?
::smiles::
Sal

[This message has been edited by Sal (edited 12-16-1999).]