Dark Poetry

[NaughtyMike]

I have submitted a series of dark poems for those who like the topics of war, death, murder, hell with ample mythological/occult references. Warning:This is non-erotic and certainly not for everyone. However, you deeper thinking Goths and wizards might find some of it "enjoyable." I request some feedback. Don't worry, if you say it stinks, I 'll only think you can't grasp the idea, which is never too plain, and sometimes made to be read on 2 levels.

 

[Unmasked Poet]

Bats, potions, and spells

Mmmm I suppose it would be best if I forgo the reading altogether and simply pursue a higher degree.
What would you recommend a doctorate perhaps?
Goth goth, ahh of course gothic. Perhaps Frodo and Harry Potter could help guide me in my curriculum choices. Two levels you say? Not one but two. A veritable duplex of poetry, ground floor for murder, death and mayhem, 2nd floor hell. You see it’s too deep for me already that can’t be I’m already confused hell must be lower. Can we make it a 3 flat? I can already tell we're in for a dark magical ride, just the way the word mythological rolls off the tongue is sheer delight.

U.P.

Welcome aboard Mike, I'll try to keep up.

 

[Savage Kitten]

pffffffffffffft don't mind him

I would chance to say that your writing is right up my ally Mike, but I guess I should read it first

I love writing dark, fantasy, goth, poetry more than any other kind. I so easily lose myself in it. I haven't submitted any of it here at Lit though. I figured there wouldn't be anyone here to appreciate it. *shrugs*

So... I am off to work.. perhaps when I get in I'll have achance to mosey on over to your stuff!

U.P. buddy,

Don't knock it until you've tried it!

Sk~

 

[Camille]

Dark stuff I don't know, but I'm off to find some of your poetry Mike.
Cam

 

[Savage Kitten]

reading, read, readest

yep, said i would read didn't i?

Ok, straight up. I think you and I have a different definition of dark poetry. I seen 2 that came close to what I considered dark. Most of your poems seemed incomplete to me, left the thought or image hanging in mid air. Also, some I didn't get at all but, I think that might have something to do with me not having any expierence with drugs. You rhyme a lot, so do I. One thing I've learned is that the majority of the critics here do not favor "sing song" rhyming poetry. But if that is your style and you are comfortable with it then so be it! I rhyme when I wanna rhyme too!

I read all of them but only voted on a few. If I read it and I didn't get it, or if it didn't sway me one way or another... I didn't vote on it.

Short n sweet, and to the point (like most men's equipment right? ) This one was too cute! Bedtime Prayer

To this one I could relate, I suppose 'cause I know a lot of people who have a 3x8 room! haha Dark Room Spinning

I liked the images in this one... gruesome.. kinda like a car accident Nightmare Ride

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[NaughtyMike]

Unaccepted poetry

I had 2 poems not considered acceptable, believe it or not. Here we have a site which preaches free speech for adults, we can say fuck, shit, cunt, cock, lick dick etc etc. but they have taboo topics.

I have found 2 such topics. My poem Incest Necrophilia was rejected. Apparnetly incest is not the problem here. I have a book on banned writings from the 1960's. One of the topis deals with necrophilia. Sam Kennison would joke about it, and it has been used in several movies. However, it can not be used as a topic.
My second rejected poem "Manson Family Prayer" is about the joy of killing your parents. I won't go into details on the poem as that seems to be the rub.

Thanks for the feedback Kitten, some of it does seem to be a work in progress. I actually wrote this stuff 10 years ago on the onset of the Gulf War. War Poem was published at that time elsewhere. I up dated the poems, changed a few words and tossed them out there. I use to keep a poetry idea book and would note ideas and lines as they came to me so I wouldn't forget them. I would also write down dreams. Nightmare ride was based on dream. The dream world has pictures, but no substance. It is one step above death. Dark Room spinning, was an actual spare room I had set up with a cheap spinning planetarium ball, some space wall posters from Edmund's scientific which covered the walls, and a healthy amount of occult items, symbols, incense, and a pair of speakers which As I recall, tend to only play "Dark Side of the Moon" . I found myself trapped in there at times, spending all night, waking with an eerie feeling. There was also a full length skeleton I had by the bed, so when I awoke I would be startled by it, as if someone had broken in and was standing over me. After a while the room became like a coffin, I was spending my life there trapped inside its walls.

Unmasked Poet- I can see you will have no trouble keeping up.