Daddy's Little Psychopath

[LordOfHell]

I recently uploaded a story I titled "Daddy's Little Psychopath" and I wanted more opinions from the Literotica public.

(Courtesy link: http://www.literotica.com/s/daddys-little-psychopath)

I've gotten a lot of requests for a sequel, and while I've got many good ideas for one, I wanted to know what some of the others here thought about the story and wanted to see in a followup. I'd appreciate all of the suggestions, criticism, and musings that anyone has to offer.

I thank anyone who takes the time to answer in advance.

Thanks

Lord Of Hell

 

[the_password]

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[LordOfHell]

Well I'm glad you enjoyed it. However, if you want the story to simply end there, then you can ignore the chapter. I did just that with "Controlling Daughter", which was a rather large influence to this story. I loved the first part, but didn't so much like where the story went in the second.

 

[the_password]

Rubbish.

 

[The_PG]

It's a pretty good story, the sex is well done, and the plot is fairly interesting aside from the time lapses that I found strangely... Altering? Each one made me sort of "reset" the beginning of the story. Also, you used the same dialog with both the daughter and father; I was expecting the daughters language to be more advanced, but that's being super picky to be quite honest. The only other real issue I had was the length it took before you got to any real sex. Perhaps actually writing out, and giving some oomphf to when the father and mother have sex would create more tension... Or it just keeps horny fuckers like me hooked longer.

So yea. Other then the "jumps" in time, I found it to be a very good read.

 

[LordOfHell]

Thanks. You have some excellent points there.

I thought about giving Rhonda more "intelligent" dialogue, but it was far more erotic (in my opinion, opinions may vary) to have her just sound like any other horny young girl.

Also, you didn't say anything about what I most wanted to know: Any ideas you'd like to see in a sequel?

 

[The_PG]

Well I'm not sure if my idea would work out since you wrote it from the fathers POV and seem more inclined to having the daughter control everything. Also, before I say it, take into mind this is coming from a sadistic-incest loving fucktard.

I think an interesting twist would be for the Dad to find someone who could control Rhonda.

An uncle, a boss of his, or a random stranger who he meets.

Someone who fits into the James Bond type mold, and I don't mean super spy. Bond just had a way with women. They might've been faster, better fighters, smarter, stronger, or whatever, but he just always got the best of them. Melting their hearts, tricking them, anything like that. You could create a sly, slick, sleuthy character that engages Rhonda's totally psycho-super-smart personality and beats it by having her overthink every single thing.

Either that... Or have her run into a macho tough guy who she can't outwit, because he doesn't give a fuck.

Sorry if those aren't the directions you're looking for, but that's what I'd write her into.