Critique Dan Brown

[Rumple Foreskin]

Greetings,

There are many different opinions of author Dan Da Vinci Code Brown. Mine, for instance, run the gamut from envy at his success to boredom with his writing. Being of unsound mind, I decided to whip out a brief critique of a 600 word passage from his other big book, Angles and Demons.

Afterward, I said to myself, “Self, that was fun. Don’t be greedy. Share it with all the other folks at the Story Discussion Circle.” After checking with “He who must be obeyed” our beloved moderator, Pure, I got the green light. Now here is your chance to critique 600 words of peerless prose by the mega-success Dan Brown.

Slide over to the SDC and take your best shot at multi-millionaire author, Dan Brown.

Rumple Foreskin

 

[Pure]

Disclaimers, limitations,

This contest not open to direct descendants of Yeshua.

 

[impressive]

Wow!

What timing. I was just reading the following paragraph from Angels & Demons aloud to Mat this morning:

Although not overly handsome in a classical sense, the forty-year-old Langdon had what his female colleagues referred to as an "erudite" appeal - wisps of gray in his thick brown hair, probing blue eyes, an arrestingly deep voice, and the strong, carefree smile of a collegiate athlete. A varsity diver in prep school and college, Langdon still had the body of a swimmer, a toned, six-foot physique that he vigilantly maintained with fifty laps a day in the university pool.

Ugh.

 

[dr_mabeuse]

What timing. I was just reading the following paragraph from Angels & Demons aloud to Mat this morning:

Although not overly handsome in a classical sense, the forty-year-old Langdon had what his female colleagues referred to as an "erudite" appeal - wisps of gray in his thick brown hair, probing blue eyes, an arrestingly deep voice, and the strong, carefree smile of a collegiate athlete. A varsity diver in prep school and college, Langdon still had the body of a swimmer, a toned, six-foot physique that he vigilantly maintained with fifty laps a day in the university pool.

Ugh.

In other words, he's 6'2" 190 pounds with black hair and piercing blue eyes without an ounce of fat on him because he works out every day.

Do I detetct the obligatory nine-inch penis in his pocket or it that just his turgid prose?

 

[EmeraldKitten]

In other words, he's 6'2" 190 pounds with black hair and piercing blue eyes without an ounce of fat on him because he works out every day.

Do I detetct the obligatory nine-inch penis in his pocket or it that just his turgid prose?

It's the obligatory nine-inch penis.

I find Mr. Langdon attractive, LOL.

*ahem* I liked Angels & Demons better. *ahem*
(Not that that had anything to do with anything. )

 

[LadyJeanne]

In other words, he's 6'2" 190 pounds with black hair and piercing blue eyes without an ounce of fat on him because he works out every day.

Do I detetct the obligatory nine-inch penis in his pocket or it that just his turgid prose?

Mr. Langdon has the good fortune of meeting exceptionally attractive women while on his adventures.

Which brings me to a pet peeve. Why the obligatory love interest? Is that really necessary in a mystery or thriller?