criticism

[femates]

Hello fellow writers!
Im wondering if someone could take a look at an exert of a new book im thinking of writing... an idea came to me one night and this is what has come out. Its really just a scene. Please note this is a Non-consent/fantasy. Please msg me if you wish to take a look and give me some CONSTRUCTIVE criticism.

 

[NaokoSmith]

Hullo my dear, welcome to Literotica.

You can get critical advice here, however just a quick warning: this is meant for stories which are to be published on Literotica. It's not regarded as Fair Play to come on, get a load of free editing advice and then publish your book on Amazon at an exorbitant rate.

On this forum you can discuss writing issues and ask writerly questions. People sometimes ask for feedback here: maybe by posting a short passage from their writing on which they have a particular question. You can also sometimes get people here to offer to read your work for you.

I know you already posted on the Editors' Forum . You properly mentioned that this would be a Noncom story. If there are any other elements, you should explain those too so that possible editors can tell if it will be their sort of thing.

Good luck!

 

[femates]

Heya. Yes this will be posted onto Lit if it every gets past draft stage.
As i said at the moment its not much so wont be posted for a while if i can get some much need assistance