Cowards

[Mag58]

This is the first time that I've felt the need (or had the time) to post on this board. I have had 32 stories published by Literotica and currently have an average score of 4.51 - so I must be pleasing some people.
Like most 'authers' I welcome all responses, even negative/critical ones if they are genuine, but recently I appear to have angered some people regarding my story 'Turkish Delight'.
I have been inundated with anonymous (of course!) comments and my 'score' has dropped to 3.60 from 4.54.
I'll have a debate with anyone regarding the content of any or all of my stories (I've covered many different themes) but why are these cowards allowed to abuse writer anonymously?
Why can't these wankers (litterally!) realise that these stories are erotica/porn and everyone has completely different tastes.
There I've got that off my (rather ample) chest!

 

[Scribbleros]

Hey Mag,
I have written to you in the past and have loved most of your stories.

Anyway why don't you put up a link for your stories.

Cheers,
Sam

 

[Mag58]

what do you mean by 'link'? is that a web page?

 

[cookiejar]

A link to Mags stories...

http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=144068

 

[hiddenself]

Are you complaining about the content/logic of the feeback or about the low scores or both?

About the first, I can't tell because I don't know what the anonymous readers said.

For the second, my own view is that 3.6 is high for this story. Considering writing, plot, etc., I rate it a high-2 or a low-3.

 

[Singularity]

Hiddenself has a point

I read Turkish Delight Chapter 1 and I have to agree that this story is one that has some rough spots.

The very beginning has a very jarring transition.

I’d been unemployed for nearly six months. We were making ends meet, just. My wife was working as many hours as possible as a receptionist and I was picking up casual work when possible. Thankfully our son was in the Army and our 17yr.old daughter had moved in with her boyfriend to make things easier for us financially.

As there was no answer from my pal’s first floor flat I walked around the corner of the dilapidated block of first floor flats that he lived in looking for somewhere to take a piss. ....

The introductionary setting of the protagonist's financial state is fine, but there is this huge leap to where he has to take a leak outside his friend's place. How did he get there? Why is he there? Does his need to piss have anything to do with his lack of money in his pocket?

I don't see the connection.

And in the same paragraph, I don't understand the reference to the empty flats.

At least half of the flats were empty and the other half were only here because no one else would have them.

When you say the "other half" are you referring to the flats, or their occupants? It is not clear.

There are also a number of places where the comma-goddess would frown and point her finger. Not a huge problem, but it makes the reading a bit uneven.

I also suggest you find a way to expand the dialog between the protagonist and his wife, and finding a way to elevate the tension he felt that evening at home. This is the central theme of the story and the emotions he must have been feeling don't come across very strongly.

When you read the rest of the story, the beginning makes more sense, and there is a good story idea inside this. It simply needs some polishing and sanding to make it nice and tight and compelling.


Singularity

 

[Mag58]

I welcome constructive criticism like this, as it genuinely helps me as a 'budding' writer. Although I find the reference to the 'comma'Goddess' pedantic (blame Word - not me!). The reference to 'his work situation' and 'the rundown state of the flats' explains why he was wandering the streets at that end of town in the middle of the day. Perhaps it needs some work - but only a 'high 2' you set very high standards!
My gripe is with the 'anonymity' of people who send personal/negative feedback (eg. bitch/hope you get aids etc) because the story is about infidelity. If that's not 'your bag' why read a story with that theme?
In fact how many stories on this site and others aren't about infidelity or cheating in one form or another? It generally makes for a more exciting story than 'My wife and I made love last night; it was nice.'
Perhaps I am being too sensitive but the scoring does disappoint me, as I felt that this story was no better/worse than any of my others.
There has also been some very friendly/positive feedback too. As I say - I think people are cowards when they hidde behind anonymity - perhaps the site can re-think that policy.
HEY-HO!

 

[Scribbleros]

I welcome constructive criticism like this, as it genuinely helps me as a 'budding' writer. Although I find the reference to the 'comma'Goddess' pedantic (blame Word - not me!). The reference to 'his work situation' and 'the rundown state of the flats' explains why he was wandering the streets at that end of town in the middle of the day. Perhaps it needs some work - but only a 'high 2' you set very high standards!
My gripe is with the 'anonymity' of people who send personal/negative feedback (eg. bitch/hope you get aids etc) because the story is about infidelity. If that's not 'your bag' why read a story with that theme?
In fact how many stories on this site and others aren't about infidelity or cheating in one form or another? It generally makes for a more exciting story than 'My wife and I made love last night; it was nice.'
Perhaps I am being too sensitive but the scoring does disappoint me, as I felt that this story was no better/worse than any of my others.
There has also been some very friendly/positive feedback too. As I say - I think people are cowards when they hidde behind anonymity - perhaps the site can re-think that policy.
HEY-HO!

Perhaps you can stop accepting anonymous feedback. That would stop all those emails.

Cheers,
Sam