Could use some help with a bisexual tale...

[christian_hm]

Hi!

I'm in the midst of writing the 3rd part of an ongoing story that i'd really appreciate some feedback on. I feel that it's been going well and i like the premise, so i don't want to screw it up, lol...

For ease of reading and typing, i'll summarize the story in point form (or you can read it if you'd like - just look under my username of christian_hm [it's the Summer on the Farm series])

-young man (Christian) goes to work on his step-uncles farm for the summer
-meets young male coworker (Dustin) and gets along well with him
-meets step-cousin twins, beautiful girls with freckles on their noses (sort of a focus of the story from a sexual POV)
-forms a bond with one of the step-cousins, Tiffany
-one day Dustin and Christian go to a river to swim and spy on step-cousin who's already there (just tanning)
-she leaves and aroused boys rationalize having anal sex together (sex for pleasure rather than forming a romantic relationship)
-boys have anal sex again that night after dinner in their lodgings (reverse positions)
-later on, Christian goes outside when Dustin's gone to sleep and finds light on in basement of house.
-investigates and finds twins who eventually start having sex (oral)
-Christian masturbates while watching
-no one is the wiser and Christian goes back to bed (this last part i've just written and is not part of my full story segments on lit)

And that's it so far. I definitely want the girls and guys to hook up, but i'd like to do it in a roundabout way that's not too hokey (i.e. i'd like to have several more sex scenes in the story before everyone is having sex with everyone. No incest other than that between the twins is going to happen (step-relations sex doesn't count as incest as far as this story goes).

Any help would be greatly appreciated!

Christian

 

[Colleen Thomas]

Hi!

I'm in the midst of writing the 3rd part of an ongoing story that i'd really appreciate some feedback on. I feel that it's been going well and i like the premise, so i don't want to screw it up, lol...

For ease of reading and typing, i'll summarize the story in point form (or you can read it if you'd like - just look under my username of christian_hm [it's the Summer on the Farm series])

-young man (Christian) goes to work on his step-uncles farm for the summer
-meets young male coworker (Dustin) and gets along well with him
-meets step-cousin twins, beautiful girls with freckles on their noses (sort of a focus of the story from a sexual POV)
-forms a bond with one of the step-cousins, Tiffany
-one day Dustin and Christian go to a river to swim and spy on step-cousin who's already there (just tanning)
-she leaves and aroused boys rationalize having anal sex together (sex for pleasure rather than forming a romantic relationship)
-boys have anal sex again that night after dinner in their lodgings (reverse positions)
-later on, Christian goes outside when Dustin's gone to sleep and finds light on in basement of house.
-investigates and finds twins who eventually start having sex (oral)
-Christian masturbates while watching
-no one is the wiser and Christian goes back to bed (this last part i've just written and is not part of my full story segments on lit)

And that's it so far. I definitely want the girls and guys to hook up, but i'd like to do it in a roundabout way that's not too hokey (i.e. i'd like to have several more sex scenes in the story before everyone is having sex with everyone. No incest other than that between the twins is going to happen (step-relations sex doesn't count as incest as far as this story goes).

Any help would be greatly appreciated!

Christian

You seem to have the ideas laid out fairly cogently, what kind of help are you looking for?

 

[christian_hm]

Basically...

Basically I'm just not sure where to go from here. I'm trying to come up with a believale series of events to get the characters to hook up together. For example, how do i get Christian (protagonist) and his step-cousin (Tiffany) together in a believable way while still balancing each of their independent sexual relationships together. Furthermore, how can i meld all of the sexual relationships into one by the end of the series? I'd like to have something a little more creative than everyone getting drunk together and having sex, or something like that. So any suggestions would be super!

Christian

 

[SEVERUSMAX]

Basically I'm just not sure where to go from here. I'm trying to come up with a believale series of events to get the characters to hook up together. For example, how do i get Christian (protagonist) and his step-cousin (Tiffany) together in a believable way while still balancing each of their independent sexual relationships together. Furthermore, how can i meld all of the sexual relationships into one by the end of the series? I'd like to have something a little more creative than everyone getting drunk together and having sex, or something like that. So any suggestions would be super!

Christian

My suggestion is a group dynamic, but one that is given some reason rooted in the characters' personalities: in other words, they should be presented as people who realistically are VERY open-minded, even to incest.

 

[christian_hm]

Thanks Severus

Thanks for the input severus. My characters are very open minded (the girls, obviously, since they're the ones having the sex together) and the guys are very rational and non-prejudiced with respect to sex. I'm not really sure what you meant by a "group dynmaic" though. Would you mind elaborating?

 

[SEVERUSMAX]

Thanks for the input severus. My characters are very open minded (the girls, obviously, since they're the ones having the sex together) and the guys are very rational and non-prejudiced with respect to sex. I'm not really sure what you meant by a "group dynmaic" though. Would you mind elaborating?

A long-term group marriage. You know, the guys could each have 2 wives and the girls two husbands, since there are 4 of them. Hell, the men could also be married to each other, as could the women. Polyamory. Basically, a polygamous marriage of the 4. That would be believable enough, right? It happens in some circles.

 

[christian_hm]

Ah, i see

Oh, okay, i see what you mean now. Yeah, i was actually thinking about something like that for in the long term. It's a good, believable possiblity (and one that i've seen in other stories, actually). Thanks for the input!

Christian

 

[SEVERUSMAX]

Oh, okay, i see what you mean now. Yeah, i was actually thinking about something like that for in the long term. It's a good, believable possiblity (and one that i've seen in other stories, actually). Thanks for the input!

Christian

You're welcum. I like that arrangement for some characters. Others are better as swingers. Still others are more inclined to monogamy, so I let each character be himself or herself.

 

[christian_hm]

Yeah, i agree, it is quite personalized to each character. All of my characters in this story are just beginning to explore their sexualities, so they're pretty much open to trying whatever. I think that as time wears on they'd be pretty open to a polyamorous sort of arrangement.

 

[OhMissScarlett]

Basically I'm just not sure where to go from here. I'm trying to come up with a believale series of events to get the characters to hook up together. For example, how do i get Christian (protagonist) and his step-cousin (Tiffany) together in a believable way while still balancing each of their independent sexual relationships together. Furthermore, how can i meld all of the sexual relationships into one by the end of the series? I'd like to have something a little more creative than everyone getting drunk together and having sex, or something like that. So any suggestions would be super!

Christian

First of all, I love the farm setting idea with the step-cousins and lesbian twin incest. I think with a story like this, it's possible to go too far, so I admire that you're looking for some believability factor. I've written a bi incest story and my biggest challenge was keeping it somewhat organic and real.

Suggestions? Christian and Tiffany could go for a ride alone and end up having dirty/romantic sex in the seat of the truck. Kind of like a "we're finally alone" scenario.

You could always set it up as a conversation after Tiffany and Christian hook-up. Say Tiffany knows what's going on with Dustin and Christian, she can just tell by the way they look at each other. It turns her on.

You could even work it that Tiffany makes the suggestion that they should all have a night together. She and her sister want to see the hot boy/boy action!

My two cents, take them with a grain of salt.

 

[christian_hm]

Thanks for the ideas!

Great suggestions, Miss Scarlet, thanks! I think that using Tiffany as a medium for whole group activities would work quite well. I was also thinking about having Christian and Tiff go off on their own to consummate their relationship, and a drive or something to that effect is quite plausible. However i was also thinking that perhaps Tiffany could come across Christian and Dustin having sex one day and she could either join in or be discovered or have something happen to that effect - although i'm not sure if that would be terribly realistic, given that she's never had a male partner before. Also, should the girls be open to all kinds of non-traditional sex? Clealy the guys are very much into anal, but would two teenage girls be?

On a side note, Miss Scarlet, I just read your Kate's Eden story and I loved it! I've worked on an organic farm in the past and it would have been amazing to have sex there (just the freshness, the vibe of the place - so good!) And yeah, i suppose that from the nature of my story you can tell that the girl-guy and guy-girl anal was right up my alley. Nice incorporation of the produce into your tale, too, lol.

Thanks!

Christian

 

[Colleen Thomas]

I'll take a sslightly different tack than has been posted so far. Believeablity, in the end, is going to be a secondary consideration. That isn't to say it should be of no consequence in you rplanning, merely that to a reader, if you've done a good job as author, there is a willingness to suspend some disbelief.

I've livedon a working farm before. In all honesty, there are multiple opportunites for two people to end up in a fairly private and decently secluded local across a work day. Were it me, I would write two, perhaps three passaged where Christian and Tiff end up together with no overt sexual connotation. Perhaps he takes off his shirt while plowing and she happens by on her way to the chicken house. Perhaps she's taking care of a sick animal while he's working on patching the roof and he's stuk by her gentle nature. Etc.

You build a few of those moments into the day, across a week or two, and it's very easy to see two people becoming infatuated with one another. From there, you need only provide place and circumstance, you've don the leg work and built the interest.

No matter how you go about it, you have to keep in mind that first and foremost, it's your writing that will take the reader there. I've had an orgasm reading a comicbook character superheroine NC piece before. Reality and realism are created by your words, not a stict adherence to probability in the real world. If the writing is engageing, I'm willing to suspend my disbelief. If you want a remarkable example, Doc M's Moth story is one.

I would suggest reading a few of the more accomplished authors here, getting a feel for how they can use the words to dispell the need for everything to make logical sense and conform to the laws of probability. If you master that, building believeable scenarios will become a snap.

 

[christian_hm]

Thanks!

Great suggestions, Colleen, thanks! I'm definitely thinking that the 'building up to it' approach is something that i'd like to do between Christian and Tiffany - I want to convey that their relationship is special, and I feel that that's a good way to go about it. And I think that adding that sense of delyaed gratification will be transferred to the reader, too.

Thanks again,

Christian