Constructive Criticism Please, first story

[kaleidoscopeyes]

Fun with a few household objects by herself. More of a vignette than a full story. I'd love some comments. https://literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?url=feeling-the-burn

Thanks

 

[LastLostIdols]

Read it and really liked it, even if it's not a genre that usually interests me. Posted a comment explaining my thoughts on the story.

Keep it up.

--LLI