Comments welcome

[erotic51]

I welcome comments on my stories, be it negative or positive. Enjoy

 

[jon.hayworth]

I was going to spend some time reading someone's stories, but I do not know the title or location of yours.

Have a look at Laurel's post at the top of this site and put a link to your stories.

Also add a link next to your signature. Go to the control panel to do this pasting the link to your Author's homepage.

jon

 

[erotic51]

feedback

Hi forum and readers, well I did ask for comments and I guess that leaves you open to this sort of thing:

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About the submission: The French Maid
This feedback was sent by: Anonymous
Comments:
How long HAS it been since you've actually HAD sex, and, NO, masturbation and prostitutes DO NOT count!

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About the submission: Airport
This feedback was sent by: Anonymous
Comments:
A woman trapped in a man's body, are you? Do us ALL a favor and stop pretending to be a writer. Stick to football, numbnuts!

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About the submission: The Woods
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Comments:
Only a true prick would use the word "prick" in a present day attempt at erotica, Loser!

ummm

It had to be an American (no offence to Americans generally) because only Americans spell favour without the 'u'. Pitty whoever wrote the above comments could not find it in themselves to sign with a name other than 'anonymous'. What are they hiding? fear of being told to f**k off, if you don't like the stories posted here, don't read them or better still don't subscribe.

I write for the fun of it, not for money. Many of the writers who post here are not professional writers, even though some might like to think they are, try to remember that.

Now that's of my chest, I have had some very nice and constructive comments as well, so I guess it all balances out in the end.
Thanks

 

[JohnOne]

Interestingly enough I received a similar response in my e-mail, as follows:

"Sadly, John, your appeal for leniency fell on deaf ears. The simple idea of a man writing from the perspective of a woman and her fantasies precludes my ability to overlook your stupidity. In other words, stop feeling sorry for yourself that you're a woman trapped in a man's body."

Considering the similarities (i.e. "stop feeling sorry for yourself that you're a woman trapped in a man's body") I can't help but beleive that the replies came from the same person.

I suppose someone could open up a whole new thread "profiling" this disturbed individual: (Obviously a woman who hates men. A victim of abuse perhaps? Maybe a woman who wishes she were a man so that she could have the power that she perceives them as having, etc.) but there are much more enjoyable things to talk about at this site. I think we can all consider the source and discern between comments of value and comments of generalized rage.

 

[erotic51]

Thanks for sharing you comments John and yes it has a familiar ring about the way both comments were written. Maybe even a case of multiple schizophrenic personalities at work here. But as you rightly say, there's lots more nice things about this site.

I guess as it was my first real posting of private works, and this is the internet, as another posting mentioned, we should expect this sort of comment, after all, I did invite opinion.

 

[jon.hayworth]

I read the Airport, The Woods, and The French Maid.

I did not think in the Woods that you made enough use of the third person. Basically it was very one-sided when the third party narration opens up a lot of possibilities you have not explored.

Remember the narrator has a god-like overview knowing what is going on physically, in the characters heads and things unknown to the characters.

I thought as quick "Jack-Off" tales they were very good, no stupid spelling mistakes, slipping tewnses etc., that are the hallmark of many such stories. As such there was (and they need) no plotline.

On a technical basis, if I were you, I would submit an editted version, with a bit at the end in italics asking for votes and directing the reader to the other stories in that canon.

jon

 

[erotic51]

Jon, thanks for the comments and feedback. The stories you read are indeed 'stand alone' but form part of what I affectionatly call my 'Vicki' set. The last paragraph opens the setting for the next chapter. I do tend to write short stories with little or no plot, as such, but I take onboard your comments. Agan thanks

 

[jon.hayworth]

That comment about little plot was not meant as a criticism - it was aknowledging the genre of the stories.

One other point a hobby-horse of mine, very short paragraphs are easier on the reader's eye, when read on screen or page for that matter. Also vary the para length, many of them were all much the same length.

jon