Comments requested.

[LunaticLorraine]

I have wrote and posted a story.
I would like comments on it.
There are seven parts so far, and dont see the point in continuing if it isnt very good.
Thankyou.

http://www.literotica.com/s/the-witch-ch-01

 

[sr71plt]

There's a forum section here specifically for this question--and you'd probably receive more response there. "Story Feedback."

(Although I'd think the grammar exhibited in first sentence of your post would keep folks from checking out your story.)

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

Get yourself a book like A WORLD LIT ONLY BY FIRE by William Manchester for a better grasp of the time youre writing about. Manchester excavated all the details that can add some fizz to your tale.

Your narration is good, and you seem to intuitively know how a story works, but the end is no end at all. Like...have her marry a young curate, then let the witch reveal that the curate is the girl's brother.

 

[Stella_Omega]

You could condense your first three chapters into one. They are very short and don't go anywhere fast. But i see that your last three chapters have red H next to them-- that's pretty good!

If you want more participation in your writing, try joining dreamwidth.org and livejournal.com and look for communities like this one; http://original-slash.dreamwidth.org/ to join.