Cock Slalom

[Brazil]

And in true Olympic efficiency, Brazil's entry in the third poetry olympics event has been posted.

Please read Cock Slalom and let us know how much you love it.

See you on the beach,



The Brazilians

 

[Guest]

Dear Brazil,

I'm Judge #4. Here are my thoughts.

STYLE (7.5)
--I liked your style. It was smooth and concise. The word choices were solid. ("Supplication"--great word.)

IMAGERY (7.5)
--You merged the slalom and sex quite nicely.
--Enjoyed "tantric valleys."

FORM (7.5)
--I liked the form you set up. That gave the poem some backbone.
--Why did you capitalize Lone? Was that to communicate some specific meaning?


I found myself having to read it several times. At the end the twist was that there were three lovers, and so that made me have to go back and re-read to reinterpret what was written. The line "Two poles planted on either side," took on a new meaning, as I'm sure you intended. I'm still trying to picture exactly how they had sex. But that's okay.

Your use of the word "cisalpine" with "explorers" was lovely, a little less literal than some of the other nations' attempts.

Very nice poem.

 

[Brazil]

wow

thank you very much for your post!
great detail!

the Lone was only a typo, no more

One of the Brazilians

(maybe we can all come together one day and then we'll try it out to see how it would work )

 

[Guest]

From Judge #4

Glad that you appreciated it.

I'm not the athletic type, but I think I could manage a nice cock slalom. As long as you keep in mind that speed is not the goal.

 

[Liechtenstein]

Good job

A well-written and very sensual poem, Brazil. The metaphor works pretty well. I found this entertaining, albeit somewhat light.