Cliche?

[rikaaim]

I'm getting to a point in my story where I have been avoiding writting it because of one small point. My main character is on a blind date. Now, would it be too cliche to have the blind date couple have sex on the first date?

 

[SeaCat]

That depends, are your two characters the kind of people who would do so? Do they find they're attracked to each other? How ould it change your story if they didn't get it on?

Cat

 

[rikaaim]

That depends, are your two characters the kind of people who would do so? Do they find they're attracked to each other? How ould it change your story if they didn't get it on?

Cat

My thing is this, eventually they will. That's a given because all of the power of the story comes from them giving into each other, but at the start they are shy and still very much testing the waters and feeling each other out.

 

[Rumple Foreskin]

rika,

Everything is a cliche'. Whether it's too much of a cliche' depends on you and your target audience. But if they're shy, having sex on the first date could be a nice plot device to complicate the process of them establishing some sort of serious relationship.

Rumple Foreskin

 

[rikaaim]

rika,

Everything is a cliche'. Whether it's too much of a cliche' depends on you and your target audience. But if they're shy, having sex on the first date could be a nice plot device to complicate the process of them establishing some sort of serious relationship.

Rumple Foreskin

The whole story revolves around perception. So, the focal point is when they have sex, where the perspective of both people change. Now, my concern is that if I lead to that too abruptly, then the thin veil of fictional reality will be shattered and the reader will think it a rushed piece of crap.

 

[Rumple Foreskin]

rika,

I like your concept, BUT, I wonder if it will work within the framework of a short story. It sounds like you're thinking about some serious character development. If so, then the idea might be more suited to a novel. My humble advice would be to keep tinkering with it, but don't limit yourself to one format.

Rumpel Foreskin

 

[rikaaim]

rika,

I like your concept, BUT, I wonder if it will work within the framework of a short story. It sounds like you're thinking about some serious character development. If so, then the idea might be more suited to a novel. My humble advice would be to keep tinkering with it, but don't limit yourself to one format.

Rumpel Foreskin

Perhaps when time allows you could do a quick review for me. I don't have much of it written yet. It's going at a slow pace and I fear that it's too slow of a pace. I need to make sure that I still have the readers interest.

 

[Rumple Foreskin]

Perhaps when time allows you could do a quick review for me. I don't have much of it written yet. It's going at a slow pace and I fear that it's too slow of a pace. I need to make sure that I still have the readers interest.

No problem. Send it to me by PM if you like. Just remember, all you'll be getting is the unwashed opinion of yet another unpublished novelist.

RF

 

[rikaaim]

No problem. Send it to me by PM if you like. Just remember, all you'll be getting is the unwashed opinion of yet another unpublished novelist.

RF

If I still have your interest then I'll know to keep going. If you fall asleep, I'll do a re-write. That simple.

 

[Rumple Foreskin]

If I still have your interest then I'll know to keep going. If you fall asleep, I'll do a re-write. That simple.

I got your PM. I'm a slow reader but I'll have something back to you by PM sometime tomorrow.

RF

 

[rikaaim]

I got your PM. I'm a slow reader but I'll have something back to you by PM sometime tomorrow.

RF

Thanks, I appreciate any help.

 

[Rumple Foreskin]

rika,

I've sent you a PM with some suggestions. They're worth every last penny you paid for 'em. By the by, IMHO, you do a good job with dialogue.

Rumple Foreskin