Cliche and Metaphor- Attemps at Usage

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Clocking Cliche


I.

On the freeway
broken----white-----lines
split----thoughts
of repetition

Vague overtures
lead to crescendos
another mile
slips by unnoticed.

We are never motionless
the earth spins
keeping us grounded
as thoughts fly by
counter clockwise.

These guarded-----rails
dented with bad turns
black-----ice, metal bent
as blood spilled.

Aways a threat of a crash
some (sic) accident
waiting to happen.


I don't define cliches
they define themselves.
We ride along the highway
burning out wasted thoughts,
leaving rubber on the pours
of an overused road.


II.



The sweet sauce
spills over her loins.
I'm dreaming now
of diving in.

Her honey leads me
to the bees nest
of my desires.

Strange, how the journey
was quickly shortened;
once I fed the hunger,
once I travelled in
the nectar of her lure.

We are all cliches
spinning in some pot,
headed for predictable
places, where our pasts
predict our futures;

where our silence
leaves us (sic)
wishing on a star
for more.

ajs
 
Cub4ucme said:
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Clocking Cliche


I.

On the freeway
broken----white-----lines
split----thoughts
of repetition

Vague overtures
lead to crescendos
another mile
slips by unnoticed.

We are never motionless
the earth spins
keeping us grounded
as thoughts fly by
counter clockwise.

These guarded-----rails
dented with bad turns
black-----ice, metal bent
as blood spilled.

Aways a threat of a crash
some (sic) accident
waiting to happen.


I don't define cliches
they define themselves.
We ride along the highway
burning out wasted thoughts,
leaving rubber on the pours
of an overused road.


II.



The sweet sauce
spills over her loins.
I'm dreaming now
of diving in.

Her honey leads me
to the bees nest
of my desires.

Strange, how the journey
was quickly shortened;
once I fed the hunger,
once I travelled in
the nectar of her lure.

We are all cliches
spinning in some pot,
headed for predictable
places, where our pasts
predict our futures;

where our silence
leaves us (sic)
wishing on a star
for more.

ajs


Passion swells
over an ocean of love
dipping into lust
dry humor getting their feet wet
embracing a scope
holding tightly to tunnel vision
in a panoramic world
 
Nice to see the varied attempts here.

It's interesting how this started. Critics constantly
condemn the use of cliche in poetry but, life itself
can be cliche and poetry is life.

It takes some skill to not sound redundant and I
thought it might be a good excersize for awareness
and incorporation of cliche.

Thus, the thread.

The sun
a red ball rising
light is colorless
 
rearview mirror at dusk

sun sets westward
a ribbon of white behind
I am leader of the pack
this time
 
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slower than a herd of turtles
fast as lightening

about as much luck as
a one legged man in a
butt kicking contest

busier than a beaver
after a flood

crazy as a road lizard...
 
We connect the dots
then bend arced lines
to our persuasions

We are cattled-driven
well wishers
piledrivers
vague hybrids:

Longing for a peek
of something finer,
hiding behind
a slipper moon

ajs
 
struck stumped
I had no bloody idea

that all of that stuff
was cliché
 
Liar said:
struck stumped
I had no bloody idea

that all of that stuff
was cliché

Nobody claimed ALL THAT STUFF is cliche.

The thread is an excersize in using both cliche and metaphor in poetry.

The other thing to consider is cliche can be viewed in two ways.

One being the noun cliche.

ex: "A watched pot never boils"

Two being the verb cliche.

ex: To say we sail the stars another way such as
"On the ocean of the sky we rode the waves of stars."

Then to comment on such: "That is so cliche."

Anyway, I didn't intend for every line to be a cliche, or be cliche, or
be written as metaphor. I merely intended for those who chose
to participate to play with both of them in their poem. I'm sure people
here like to play with things, or they wouldn't have ended up here.

Yes, that would include me too.

best,
andy
 
fantasy

fortune flickers
hinged on notions
of chance of a lifetime

I pause between
luck of the draw
and dead mans curve

roll the dice
 
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