Class President - Cumdump

[TheLittleAnarchist]

Hiya everyone!

This is an idea I had a little while ago, I want to see what you all think, and if you have any comments/suggestions on the story. It is a Second Person POV story, so anytime that the word "You" is used in this description, it references a male reader.

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The story takes place at a high school prom (evidently, everyone involved in the story is either 18 or older). Your date to the prom, who was very last minute and not really someone that you're into, got a nervous at dancing and touching during the dance, and decided to go home without you. Your night not going great, you decide to leave the dancing and wander the halls by yourself. No one is around at the halls, as all the staff members are at the dance, making sure there is no one smoking weed or acting too inappropriate.

Walking down the halls, you notice a group of three boys leaving out of a small hallway that is rarely used. They don't notice you, but you decide to see what they were doing back there, as there's nothing better to do right now. Going down the hallway, it's almost pitch black, except for a light flooding out of a class room at the end of the hall.

Entering the class room, you see a body on top of one of the desks. Walking a little closer, you recognize it as Kayla, the Student Body President. She's usually very professional, straight-A's, dressed up nicely all the time, doesn't show of cleavage or legs, etc. That being said, she's a fantasy for many of the boys in the school, given her bright ginger hair, stunning blue eyes, freckles, flawless skin, but also her 34DD breasts and large, round ass. But, right now, she's tied to a desk, completely naked. Her arms are spread wide, and her legs are spread open, tied to the base of the legs of the desk. Her head hanging over the edge of the desk, her mouth is held open with a ring gag. She's blindfolded, with large over-ear earphones on, blaring metal music, ensuring that she can't hear a thing going on.

On the blackboard, there is a note from her boyfriend, the captain of the football team, saying that she is "proving that she'll do whatever he asks" and that anyone who finds her is free to use her, so long as they tally where they came. Underneath are the tally marks. Her face and breasts are covered in sperm, which is also leaking out of her two holes. The reader then proceeds to use her for the next little while.
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Woo. Sorry, I know that was a lot of reading. Just got a lot of details in my brain. What do you guys think?

 

[tnhardon]

Hiya everyone!

This is an idea I had a little while ago, I want to see what you all think, and if you have any comments/suggestions on the story. It is a Second Person POV story, so anytime that the word "You" is used in this description, it references a male reader.

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The story takes place at a high school prom (evidently, everyone involved in the story is either 18 or older). Your date to the prom, who was very last minute and not really someone that you're into, got a nervous at dancing and touching during the dance, and decided to go home without you. Your night not going great, you decide to leave the dancing and wander the halls by yourself. No one is around at the halls, as all the staff members are at the dance, making sure there is no one smoking weed or acting too inappropriate.

Walking down the halls, you notice a group of three boys leaving out of a small hallway that is rarely used. They don't notice you, but you decide to see what they were doing back there, as there's nothing better to do right now. Going down the hallway, it's almost pitch black, except for a light flooding out of a class room at the end of the hall.

Entering the class room, you see a body on top of one of the desks. Walking a little closer, you recognize it as Kayla, the Student Body President. She's usually very professional, straight-A's, dressed up nicely all the time, doesn't show of cleavage or legs, etc. That being said, she's a fantasy for many of the boys in the school, given her bright ginger hair, stunning blue eyes, freckles, flawless skin, but also her 34DD breasts and large, round ass. But, right now, she's tied to a desk, completely naked. Her arms are spread wide, and her legs are spread open, tied to the base of the legs of the desk. Her head hanging over the edge of the desk, her mouth is held open with a ring gag. She's blindfolded, with large over-ear earphones on, blaring metal music, ensuring that she can't hear a thing going on.

On the blackboard, there is a note from her boyfriend, the captain of the football team, saying that she is "proving that she'll do whatever he asks" and that anyone who finds her is free to use her, so long as they tally where they came. Underneath are the tally marks. Her face and breasts are covered in sperm, which is also leaking out of her two holes. The reader then proceeds to use her for the next little while.
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Woo. Sorry, I know that was a lot of reading. Just got a lot of details in my brain. What do you guys think?

I personally am not much for BDSM, but I'll try to not let that cloud my judgement of your story.

You do seem to have a nice amount of detail to the lead up of your story. I think it would help if you opened with some background on the main character. Is he a nerd, shy, outgoing, athlete, outcast, etc. By setting up the main character's background you will be able to better relate to the feelings he has when he sees Kayla in the classroom.

Maybe the main character was hoping to have sex that night with his date and is sexually frustrated so now he is excited to have someone to have sex release with. He may be friends with Kayla but has always had a crush on her and he is excited to have an opportunity to have sex with her without her knowing.

Maybe the main character has long had a crush on the popular class president but she has never noticed him because he is not popular. He comes to her rescue as she has been forced to do this against her will. As he unties Kayla, she is both scared and embarrassed to have been violated by people she doesn't know and been found naked by this classmate. He is incredibly nice and caring to her and helps her get cleaned up and back into her ravishing prom dress. As the two exit the classroom, the boyfriend sees them from down the hall. He is mad that she has been released and chases them down the hall and out of the building. Kayla and the main character get into his car and take off as the boyfriend chases them. They finally are able to ditch him through some crafting maneuvering on the main characters part. The main character tries to console Kayla, as she is still very upset. She finds comfort in his arms and after a night of hiding and talking through what happened to her, Kayla falls in love with the main character and they make passionate love together in his car.

Just spit balling some ideas to keep the story interesting.

 

[TheLittleAnarchist]

I think it would help if you opened with some background on the main character. Is he a nerd, shy, outgoing, athlete, outcast, etc. By setting up the main character's background you will be able to better relate to the feelings he has when he sees Kayla in the classroom.

I see what you're saying, but by making it Second Person POV, my goal is to allow the reader to put themselves in the situation/story as much as possible. Meaning, by describing the reader as shy, anybody who isn't shy is already partially taken out of the story. My plan is to make the Main Characters actions be something that any person could do in that situation - whether they're shy, confident, loner, social butterfly, etc. Evidently it isn't possible to include everyone, though.

Maybe the main character was hoping to have sex that night with his date and is sexually frustrated so now he is excited to have someone to have sex release with. He may be friends with Kayla but has always had a crush on her and he is excited to have an opportunity to have sex with her without her knowing.

I DO really like this idea. I think I'm definitely going to roll with this one a bit, for sure!

 

[tnhardon]

I see what you're saying, but by making it Second Person POV, my goal is to allow the reader to put themselves in the situation/story as much as possible. Meaning, by describing the reader as shy, anybody who isn't shy is already partially taken out of the story. My plan is to make the Main Characters actions be something that any person could do in that situation - whether they're shy, confident, loner, social butterfly, etc. Evidently it isn't possible to include everyone, though.



I DO really like this idea. I think I'm definitely going to roll with this one a bit, for sure!

I understand. Seems like you have a good handle on the direction that you'd like to head. I'd say go ahead and start and let us know if you run into any issues. If nothing else, write a story that you enjoy.

 

[TheLittleAnarchist]

I understand. Seems like you have a good handle on the direction that you'd like to head. I'd say go ahead and start and let us know if you run into any issues. If nothing else, write a story that you enjoy.

Will do. Thank you very much for your input!