Cinder's Women- Mouse's Tale

[LordHyperion]

I've been working on my Cinder's Women book for some time, and there are some sections that I like, and some that I don't.

Feedback is fine, but it usually ends up "oh my, this is great" variety butt-kissing- which is nice, but not exactly helpful.

I'm looking for honest thought. What works in it and what doesn't?

Any takers?

 

[Pure]

Check the 'sticky' thread marked 'Discussion Feedback.' (Introduce yourself if you want.) This area of the forum is set up for critiques on a 'swap' basis.

J.
'temporary traffic director'

 

[BlackShanglan]

The "Story Feedback" forum would be a good place to post this sort of non-swap offer, by the way

Shanglan

 

[LordHyperion]

Thank you both for your replies. Once I get through with my current project, I'll look into it.