Christy, Chris, & Jack

[klvyoenne]

New to posting, but not new to Literotica, I've posted my first 3 stories and would appreciate your comments. Christy, Chris, & Jack parts 1-3 are available for your reading pleasure in Erotic Couplings, #'s 3496, 6924, and 2273.

I would appreciate your perusal and commentary--although I'm really not looking for flaming criticism, constructive critisism is welcome and, of course, accolades and praise (although I doubt it's at that point as of yet.)

Be aware, this storyline is nowhere near complete--so please don't worry that the story isn't flaming hot (yet.)

Thank you!

~ Klvyoenne

 

[klvyoenne]

Link

For your convienience the link to the first part of the story is posted here.

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=240086

Thank you!

~ Klvyoenne

 

[Darkniciad]

You've got a good setup going. The characters are well described, and the motivation for what certainly appears to be coming is there as well.

Keep it going, you've got a winner here.

 

[HornyHenry]

My humble opinion

If it was me, I'd make all three parts into chapter #1.
Each of the parts are too short and don't contain enough of the story to stand on their own.

You might make the next part longer, taking us all the way to the consumation of something happening between the characters. This was a good buildup, but it's time for some meat, or substance.

Keep it up, please. Good start.