Chrissie Lynn's Boy

[PlacidoSwann]

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=434085

If you haven't read it I hope you will.

mia culpa: I read it and re-read it and cross-checked it and when I re-read it here, and I found more typos then I was happy with. I'll have to do better.

But there was much about it I liked. I think it teases well and pays off. If Chrissie Lynn and Jack are "physically too perfect" well, its a first effort and I catered to my fantasies. I have other fantasies and other physical types will appear, I'm sure.

There were some lines I rather liked, one of my favorites being:

A first kiss between lovers, not quite chaste, not quite wanton.

There is a lot of focus on breasts. I like breasts, but much of it is from the perspective of and 18 year old without much experience of breasts.... it doesn't seem unrealistic to me that Jack would be fixated.

I'll enjoy hearing from you.

 

[PlacidoSwann]

Several of you have read my story it seems and replied via e-mail.

One was a request for Chrissie Lynn's fertility to be activated. Heh, we'll see. You of course may imagine what you wish. But it does seem that the story must have had some impact on this e-mailer.

The other two comments were highly complimentary, and hoped for more of Chrissie Lynn and Jack's adventures. This is of course very gratifying. I've an idea or two percolating, so I may get to it.

Alas, I can't quite my job just yet.

 

[PlacidoSwann]

In the works, "Chrissie Lynn's Candy."

 

[PlacidoSwann]

I've continued to receive some very complementary comments about my story. A follow-up is progressing somewhat slowly, but it will be a bit more ambitious, with more characters and greater length, I suspect.

So far its been a fun challenge.

Thanks for all of the good words, both at the story and by private e-mail. One writer wondered if i was male or female. I have to think of that as very high praise.

 

[PlacidoSwann]

A follow up story, Chrissie Lynn's Candy has been uploaded and is pending approval. I thought it would be longer then the first story, but it turned out a little shorter. More characters and a more compex situation, but the same love between Chrissie Lynn and her son, Jack.
Hope its accepted. Hope you enjoy.

 

[relisabe]

i just read it, hot!

 

[PlacidoSwann]

Thankee,

Chrissie Lynn's Candy isn't quite the same kind of direct build that a "first time" story could be. And with more characters doing the narration, it may be harder to follow... certainly one reader has thought so. Fair enough, I'm trying out things. I'll probably keep with the multiple perspective when I get around to the final story, Chrissie Lynn's Desire, if only for the sake of consistency and to continue to hone my skills.

But I am also playing around with an idea for a stort featuring different characters from a different slant... as time and passion permit.