change of voice??

[LitEroCat]

My brain fuzzed out trying to work in a twist to a story idea. I hope you have some clearer thoughts you can share.

I have 2 primary characters interact with 4 others in part A. In part B, a nonagenarian meets them. I want the story to appear to be told from the primary male view, but we find out much later that the old fart is telling it as a tale of hope... possibly to his grandkids. It's 90% written, so the last 10% should only take 90% more time. ???

The details don't matter much for this structure, so forget that it's an erotic story. Go on, FORGET IT! I said forget it!

 

[LitEroCat]

Problem solved....

My brain fuzzed out trying to work in a twist to a story idea. I hope you have some clearer thoughts you can share.

I have 2 primary characters interact with 4 others in part A. In part B, a nonagenarian meets them. I want the story to appear to be told from the primary male view, but we find out much later that the old fart is telling it as a tale of hope... possibly to his grandkids. It's 90% written, so the last 10% should only take 90% more time. ???

The details don't matter much for this structure, so forget that it's an erotic story. Go on, FORGET IT! I said forget it!

I forgot I posted this.... I found a solution that seems to work. the story is now in 3 parts and this twist is in the last one. They are:

Nonagenarian --- Exhibitionist on Amtrak sucks in strangers, prelude.

Nonagenarian Ch. 02 --- AMTRAK GROPEs; happy geezer; shared exhib wife.

Nonagenarian Epi --- Friendly perversions with aides (a tale of hope??)

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

Make him schizophrenic with multiple personalities.

 

[AsylumSeeker]

I'm not a schizophrenic! And neither am I! And neither am I!