caught in the rain

[crappie master]

Many years ago(in the mid 70's) I was in a group of kids who went to an amusement park. While we were there a quick summer rain storm came up and really soaked most of the people in the park.To this day that is one of my most fond (and kind of voyeuristic)memories. All those wet girls in wet t-shirts . I was wondering if anyone thinks this might make a good story. I'm a poor writer myself so feel free to go with this idea if you want. It could even be more interesting if told from perspective of a young(over 18 of course) lady who got caught in the rain only to realize her shirt is now see-thru and then notices the effect it has on the guys who see her. Just an idea

 

[crappie master]

ok 45 reads no replies guess maybe it isn't good story material after all

 

[NASCARaddicted]

I think it is a great idea.

But I think the number of the people should be reduced.

I had a similar idea in the past: A guy and a girl (no couple, just buddies, or maybe even complete strangers) are mountain climbing. At first, it was very warm, so the girl only wears a thing white t-shirt and no bra. Suddenly, it starts to rain like mad, and the temperatures sink rapidly. So the T-Shirt of the girl becomes see-thru and because of the lower temps, her nipples become errected, they are very clearly visible.

Half a mile away, there is a small hut. They run to this hut, but all the time, it keeps on raining. When they finally reach the hut, they are both soaking wet. The hut has a small fireplace, so they build a small fire to get warm again. But if you wear wet clothes, especially when it is cold, you can get ill very easily. So you need to take the wet clothes off ....

Also, just to add: I remember, I once saw a movie with Rock Hudson (I think the movie was called "Man's favorite Sport". Here is a small summary from IMDB.com

Roger Willoughby (Rock Hudson) works at a sporting goods store and is the author of a best selling guide to fishing, even though he has never fished. However Abby inveigles him to enter a fishing tournament.

So, at one time, Rock Hudson is sitting on a camp fire together with 2 women. The women talk alot, but suddenly it starts to rain. The women don't stop talking, but suddenly, Rock Hudson covers his eyes (like a real Gentleman). The ladies notice this and ask him why he covers his eyes. His answer was: "In the rain, your blouses become see-thru ...

Of course, back then (1954) they didn't show nipples or something like that, but just the imagination .... drool

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[sirhugs]

I also think its a fresh new idea worth you trying. I would prefer to see you start with the group though, so the protagonist and sex object are not already a couple. She is likely a popular fashionable girl ( cheerleader?); he a nerd. The mechanics of why she responds to him in this setting though are daunting. Maybe they all run in various directions for shelter? These two end up separated from the group, huddling to stay warm, and run into the tunnel of love or haunted house.

 

[NASCARaddicted]

sounds interesting.

Also, what about this: it is already getting dark, when it starts to rain on the cheerleades. So they all run away to hide from the rain.

This one girl seeks shelter from the rain in an abandoned house. She is wet, so she gets undressed. In the house, all the windows are covered with boards, so it is very dark in the house. Suddenly, she feels that she is not alone in the house.

"Ben, is that you ?" (Ben is her boyfriend)

"Yep" (but it ain't Ben - it is Fred the nerd)

"Oh Ben, I am so glad that it's you, and no one else. Come on, get undressed."

They both get undressed, and Fred starts to touch her, and in the end, they have sex in the dark.

But the girl notices that something is different. Usually, her friend Ben is selfish. All that he cares about is his orgasm, but not hers. (you know this type of guy - if you watch an 80s teenager movie, there is always this quarterback - his girlfriend is the hottest girl in the school, even though this guy is a stupid bully).
However - now, for the first time, she has an orgasm, the sex was fantastic. Fred is really good in bed, unlike Ben

And then ... maybe they fall asleep until the next morning. Or, it stops to rain, and some of the other girls search them with a flashlight. Anyway: Suddenly, the girl sees the face of the guy. Of course, she is surprised, that it ain't Ben. But then ... she enjoyed the sex so much, that she splits with Ben and therefore starts to date Fred ...

 

[sirhugs]

sounds interesting.

Also, what about this: it is already getting dark, when it starts to rain on the cheerleades. So they all run away to hide from the rain.

This one girl seeks shelter from the rain in an abandoned house. She is wet, so she gets undressed. In the house, all the windows are covered with boards, so it is very dark in the house. Suddenly, she feels that she is not alone in the house.

"Ben, is that you ?" (Ben is her boyfriend)

"Yep" (but it ain't Ben - it is Fred the nerd)

"Oh Ben, I am so glad that it's you, and no one else. Come on, get undressed."

They both get undressed, and Fred starts to touch her, and in the end, they have sex in the dark.

But the girl notices that something is different. Usually, her friend Ben is selfish. All that he cares about is his orgasm, but not hers. (you know this type of guy - if you watch an 80s teenager movie, there is always this quarterback - his girlfriend is the hottest girl in the school, even though this guy is a stupid bully).
However - now, for the first time, she has an orgasm, the sex was fantastic. Fred is really good in bed, unlike Ben

And then ... maybe they fall asleep until the next morning. Or, it stops to rain, and some of the other girls search them with a flashlight. Anyway: Suddenly, the girl sees the face of the guy. Of course, she is surprised, that it ain't Ben. But then ... she enjoyed the sex so much, that she splits with Ben and therefore starts to date Fred ...

other than the ending, which rings false to my jaded experience, I like it. Please write it.

 

[Chicklet]

ok 45 reads no replies guess maybe it isn't good story material after all

don't judge things by the ammount of views. I view things four or five times before I reply. And keep in mind it counts YOUR views. When I post something sometimes I view it six or seven times before anyone replies...because...chicklet is a dork.

 

[sirhugs]

Chicklet is NOT a dork

don't judge things by the ammount of views. I view things four or five times before I reply. And keep in mind it counts YOUR views. When I post something sometimes I view it six or seven times before anyone replies...because...chicklet is a dork.

if you're a dork, what am I?

 

[Carlos 74]

Hey, didn't the abandoned wearhouse story happen in "Revenge of the Nerds?" The nerd happened to have the same costume as the head cheerleader's boyfriend. She took him to some sort of moon funhouse or something and they starting having sex, except that she noticed he was better.
Geez, i'm dating myself.

 

[sirhugs]

Hey, didn't the abandoned wearhouse story happen in "Revenge of the Nerds?" The nerd happened to have the same costume as the head cheerleader's boyfriend. She took him to some sort of moon funhouse or something and they starting having sex, except that she noticed he was better.
Geez, i'm dating myself.

better than not hasving a date at all.

As Woody Allen said, " being bisexual has some appeal. It doubles your chances of a date Sturday night."

I think that was before he started sshtupping his girlfriend's daughter.

 

[Chicklet]

Re: Chicklet is NOT a dork

if you're a dork, what am I?

a dip, maybe? or dolt? = )

 

[sirhugs]

Re: Re: Chicklet is NOT a dork

a dip, maybe? or dolt? = )

on a poetic note
might I be a dolt
with an impressive bolt?
or a dip
who's kinda hip?

 

[NASCARaddicted]

I am not sure, but yes, maybe I was influenced by some 80s movie. I have seen so many of them ...

As for the ending of my idea ... yeah, I guess, it is a little bit unrealistic. But I couldn't come up with a better ending.

 

[sirhugs]

I am not sure, but yes, maybe I was influenced by some 80s movie. I have seen so many of them ...

As for the ending of my idea ... yeah, I guess, it is a little bit unrealistic. But I couldn't come up with a better ending.

she rejects the imposter, for all sorts of reasons- his deceit, her shame, fear of other's reactions, or genuine love for bf. But now that he has experioenced her, he is complete. If you want tragedy, you have him die- jump off tower, hit by lightening. If you want a Hollyweird happy ending, he wakes up to find her gone, but the sweet wallflower that watched is there. she strips, we find out she is the " ugly duckling", they are in heaven .

 

[penguindance]

 

[sirhugs]

I like the idea of being caught in the rain, I just don't think it is a story line in itself. It did give me a nice picture of a scene that could be worked into other stories though!

the trapped/shipwrecked variation not appealing?