can you walk the walk?

[gauchecritic]

I've been greatly pleased by the feedback from my stories, an on-going effort "Nice Work" but when I re-read them I can't help thinking that there is far too much dialogue, ( I KNOW there are fare too many parentheses) can someone give me a yes or no or even a maybe would help.

Ps I don't know how to post links to my stories. Soz

 

[KillerMuffin]

Go to the story page. Left click in the address bar then right click in the address bar. Or just right click with some browsers. Pick copy.

Come back here and do the whole post reply/new thread thing. Type whatever. Then either right click in the message window and pick paste or press ctrl-v (with Windows PCs).

The URL business will be taken care of for you so it shows up as a link we can click.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=57518
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=60342


No, I don't think there's too much dialogue. I do think that it shouldn't start with dialogue, but that's personal preference. I like a little bit of narration before getting straight into the characters. It's like a little bit of foreplay.

 

[Whispersecret]

I have no problem with a story that starts with dialogue. Heh heh.

 

[Couture]

I didn't mind the dialog in the story I read. I didn't even mind starting with the dialog. Bam, right into it. It worked.

I didn't like the parenthesis. They were distracting. So was that 'and now back to the story' bit.

 

[gauchecritic]

thankyou

Thanks very much killermuffin for that information, and the obs. on my story. thankyou also whisper and couture.

I sincerely hope I'm not getting anyone's dander risen in the other threads.