Can anyone flesh this out?

[saltysol]

I've never posted to this board so I'm not exactly sure how it works. Here is an outline of a fantasy my wife and I often play with, I'd love to see it fleshed out or perhaps taken in a new direction by someone else.


Happily married couple in their 40's, wife is an insatiable whore who craves being physically and verbally degraded during gang bangs. As a treat for her husband who usually watches and photographs she hires a tight young blonde bimbo to service her husband and pays her from her gang bang tips...

 

[Sean Renaud]

Okay I hate to be that guy but you're not giving us enough to work with and my first instinct is to tell you to go back to the story side of the site and simply put search for gangbang, wife, degrading and see what the hell pops up. The search engine can be a bit finnicky at times but you should find tons and tons of stories that more or less fit your fantasy.

If you are looking for something that is actually about you and your wife then I recommend you start giving us character details, looks are nice but more about the two you personality wise. You can make up names similar to yours or entirely different (the reality is that I'm sure if you go on Facebook and put in your name there are two other guys on Facebook with your exact same name so. . .nobody is actually going to know it's you) but I get the very real fear.

What kinds of things does she find degrading, are there any hard boundaries not to touch?

 

[Hypoxia]

You can write it yourself. We all started as non-writers. You need only practice. And practice.

If you've worked out your fantasies, try this technique: Visualize your story as a movie or play you're watching. Blog it: write down the actions, your thoughts and feelings and sensations, the setting, all that stuff, as it's happening. That's the framework of the story, like a sculptor's armature. Words are like clay. Pack some on, scrape some off, till you get a form you like. That's your story!

 

[saltysol]

Thanks for the responses! As I mentioned, I am new to this particular forum on lit so I appreciate the direct feedback.

I did not include more details because I was unsure as to how much might be too much and was concerned with spoiling the creative intention of those who like having less structure on which they hang details. If anyone is interested in this story idea and would like more detail about our somewhat non-typical romance please contact me via PM or directly [email removed per forum rules.]

As to writing it myself, I enjoy applying the meager skills I've acquired over the years and enjoy sharing them on Fetlife but in this particular instance, I was interested is seeing where other kinky minds might take the outline of a fantasy that my wife and I have explored extensively.

Thanks again for your comments!

Salty

 

[Sean Renaud]

Here's the thing, you can give quite a bit of details without really getting people too focused. I'm going to use what is probably the most famous (though the Ninja Turtles are a close second and there are other examples just none I can virtually guarantee you are familiar with)

Adam West Batman
Micheal Keatan Batman
Christian Bale Batman
Ben Afleck Batman

All four of these characters share similar background of dead parents, billionaire, raised by a butler, evil clowns etc etc. These are four VERY different tones, four very different characters at the end of the day ranging from a rich playboy who is clearly having fun, one who seems to mostly enjoy his life other than occasionally, and one who is clearly commiting suicide and failing at it spectacularly.

I doubt you would give as much background as goes into Batman mind you but I also didn't bring in the three cartoons and the major video game as additional evidence of how much you can vary within a fairly rigid frame work.

 

[saltysol]

Sean, if you're suggesting an all Batman gangbang of my wife, I am 100% on board with that (she, I'm certain, would be too, although truth be told, she's a Hulk gal) sure it deviates from what was originally in my head but damned if you didn't improve on the story!

One kind soul has PM'd for details which I appreciate but it's quite likely that this particular story idea just isn't resonating with the lit-folk at this time and there's no harm, no foul in that.

Here's the thing, you can give quite a bit of details without really getting people too focused. I'm going to use what is probably the most famous (though the Ninja Turtles are a close second and there are other examples just none I can virtually guarantee you are familiar with)

Adam West Batman
Micheal Keatan Batman
Christian Bale Batman
Ben Afleck Batman

All four of these characters share similar background of dead parents, billionaire, raised by a butler, evil clowns etc etc. These are four VERY different tones, four very different characters at the end of the day ranging from a rich playboy who is clearly having fun, one who seems to mostly enjoy his life other than occasionally, and one who is clearly commiting suicide and failing at it spectacularly.

I doubt you would give as much background as goes into Batman mind you but I also didn't bring in the three cartoons and the major video game as additional evidence of how much you can vary within a fairly rigid frame work.