TabooTeller
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Hello, I am not sure what the difference between this forum and the Story Discussion Circle but I thought I would l post this here anyway. I had a post about a Story called Accediental Fantasy but now I can't find it, hopefully someone wol respond to it some time.
Anyway:
A few words about “Camping Can Be Great Fun” by ARGEE. First I want to say that I know its just a story. But we have a habit of getting involved with characters in the stories we read. And I have read critiques of books and movies that also talk about the things that happen to various characters. This type of discussion is the normal way of discussing stories. It is a well done story, good easily understandable introduction. The sex scene was a bit underdone though. There needs to be another one perhaps with the Main Character watching his wife. The story was good up intill the MC started being punished. First his wife having sex all night was a bit too much. Just a bit. That wasn’t so bad but from when he got slapped the story went down hill, for my tastes anyway. He got way too much punished for his “crime”. And the other man’s wife came to him for sex yet she not only got away scot free but she was part of the MC’s punishment. That was totally unfair. I am not saying the MC’s wife should have had shouted her down but she should have realized it was just her husband’s fault. What he did, in the context of this story, was bad and he deserved some punishment but it way over board. His wife telling him that he couldn’t have sex with her for five months while she probably had sex with the other husband was not good and when she said, after the five months, that she didn’t care if the MC ever had sex with her again that was below the belt. Saying that their sex lives eventually returned to normal was good but I did not enjoy the last part of this story.
I sent a notice through Liteerotica, saying all this to ARGEE and asking if anyone else had agreed with me. No response so hopefully he will see this note
Anyway:
A few words about “Camping Can Be Great Fun” by ARGEE. First I want to say that I know its just a story. But we have a habit of getting involved with characters in the stories we read. And I have read critiques of books and movies that also talk about the things that happen to various characters. This type of discussion is the normal way of discussing stories. It is a well done story, good easily understandable introduction. The sex scene was a bit underdone though. There needs to be another one perhaps with the Main Character watching his wife. The story was good up intill the MC started being punished. First his wife having sex all night was a bit too much. Just a bit. That wasn’t so bad but from when he got slapped the story went down hill, for my tastes anyway. He got way too much punished for his “crime”. And the other man’s wife came to him for sex yet she not only got away scot free but she was part of the MC’s punishment. That was totally unfair. I am not saying the MC’s wife should have had shouted her down but she should have realized it was just her husband’s fault. What he did, in the context of this story, was bad and he deserved some punishment but it way over board. His wife telling him that he couldn’t have sex with her for five months while she probably had sex with the other husband was not good and when she said, after the five months, that she didn’t care if the MC ever had sex with her again that was below the belt. Saying that their sex lives eventually returned to normal was good but I did not enjoy the last part of this story.
I sent a notice through Liteerotica, saying all this to ARGEE and asking if anyone else had agreed with me. No response so hopefully he will see this note
