Brushing up a weird horror tale

[manyeyedhydra]

Hi, I'm trying to brush up some of my stories to maybe try and put an anthology together. I've found the feedback both here and on the SDC board to be very helpful at pointing out flaws and areas where I can make improvements.

Here's a tale from the recent Nude Day contest.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=374172

This is a distinguished "Last Place" recipient, which means it either:

A) annoyed the hell out of the trolls.

or

B) is just crap.

I was aiming for a slightly warped little horror piece (with a good dollop of black humour) but the concept might have been a little too ridiculous.

Any comments much appreciated

cheers.

 

[Guest]

This is a distinguished "Last Place" recipient, which means it either:

A) annoyed the hell out of the trolls.

or

B) is just crap.

I was aiming for a slightly warped little horror piece (with a good dollop of black humour) but the concept might have been a little too ridiculous.

And I think you were spot-on. It is indeed a slightly warped horror piece with a good dollop of black humor--the ring at the end is a lovely touch--and the writing is excellent.

It's simply not going to be everyone's meat; you're catering to a niche audience, here.

Since it's not crap, you must have annoyed the hell out of the trolls. Good job, that!

 

[GratefulFred]

Hi, I'm trying to brush up some of my stories to maybe try and put an anthology together. I've found the feedback both here and on the SDC board to be very helpful at pointing out flaws and areas where I can make improvements.

Here's a tale from the recent Nude Day contest.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=374172

This is a distinguished "Last Place" recipient, which means it either:

A) annoyed the hell out of the trolls.

or

B) is just crap.

I was aiming for a slightly warped little horror piece (with a good dollop of black humour) but the concept might have been a little too ridiculous.

Any comments much appreciated

cheers.

I nearly always shoot for the warped, the strange and the humorous with a twist or two and thus will never see the light of an H on this website (save twice). Considering I've written similar stories about enlarged andr shrunken sexual organs, I am happy to see I am not alone in my quest. Keep it up!

Freddy