Hi Everyone,
I just finished a story about a glass-fetish couple experimenting with breath control. Any editors interested in checking it out? I'm pretty confident with it, but another eye looking for plot holes, lags, or simple grammar/spelling/punctuation is always appreciated.
Here's a sample:
Two minutes. He scrambled to her head and tenderly touched her forehead, cheeks, lips, inviting her to release the glass piece from her mouth and breathe again. He unbuckled the head harness and as the cock and gag slipped from her mouth, she gasped in complete exhaustion. Her back rose and fell as she swallowed air into her lungs. She remained bent over the bench as he held her head and whispered secret loving words into her ear. Her hair was still fallen over her face, but he knew that she smiled.
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Feel free to ask for more information or PM me.
Thanks!
I just finished a story about a glass-fetish couple experimenting with breath control. Any editors interested in checking it out? I'm pretty confident with it, but another eye looking for plot holes, lags, or simple grammar/spelling/punctuation is always appreciated.
Here's a sample:
Two minutes. He scrambled to her head and tenderly touched her forehead, cheeks, lips, inviting her to release the glass piece from her mouth and breathe again. He unbuckled the head harness and as the cock and gag slipped from her mouth, she gasped in complete exhaustion. Her back rose and fell as she swallowed air into her lungs. She remained bent over the bench as he held her head and whispered secret loving words into her ear. Her hair was still fallen over her face, but he knew that she smiled.
***
Feel free to ask for more information or PM me.
Thanks!
