Brand new writer

[KlassActt9]

Hi all...I am a new writer, and have just posted a couple new stories ("Glory Hole" and "Unexpected Happening"). Not at all sure of my abilities in this field (if any), I would appreciate any feedback I could get on them, and of course, I'm always open for new ideas and situations.

KlassActt

 

[Boratus]

I just read Unexpected Happenings and really enjoyed it. The story was very compelling and I was anxious to see how far things would go. I would have liked to have a description of the "first time" but can't really fault you for it. I was surprised that in an actually story like that (as opposed to a scene) there was only one line of dialogue, but it worked.

Check you spelling and grammar or get an editor as there were mistakes throughout but mostly in sentence formation. Also the first dozen paragraphs are a mess because your punctuation got translated wrong somehow. Apostrophes came out as equals signs and a few other bizarre happenings. You may want to resubmit after editing.

I personally think it belongs in erotic couplings not E/V because although that aspect was prevalent it wasn't the point of the story. Nonetheless it was memorable and something I'd actually go back and read again as the characters felt very real. Well, apparently they were. ;-)

 

[KlassActt9]

comments.... "Unexpected Happenings"

Boratus...

Thank you for you comments on "Unexpected Happenings". I appreciate them, just as I appreciate you reading the story. I have no idea of what might have happened to the punctuation in the translation. That beats me, but I'll certainly look at it and repair it if I can.

I was very glad that you felt the characters were "real", because they were! It was one of the most beautiful, and saddest periods of my life, and I should have been prepared for it. I knew the eventual break up was going to happen sooner or later, but thre was nothing I could do about it! It just happened.

I presently have several more stories in "the works", and will post them as soon as they are completed. I am using the comments I've received regarding writing style, punctuation, etc., and hope that these new offerings are accepted as well as these have been. Thanks again for your input.