Boss and younger girl

CheekyGiRL07

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My Fantasy

“God, this feels so good.” I though as I was standing behind the counter with is dick pressed against my ass. As he went to open the cash drawer I softly told him “Do you press your hard dick against everyone or is this just for me?” He grinned and replied “Only for a sexy girl like you.”

The person I am describing is my fucking hot boss. He’s quite a bit older around 30 while I am 18. I have always been the girl who has a crush on the teacher or some older guy so this wasn’t to surprising when I thought this up. At this point if he asked me, I would fuck him as hard as he wanted and blow him till he cummed. He’s not good looking just an overweight middle aged man, but he makes my pussy wet.

I went into the office to clock out and saw Mr. D sitting there. “M do you have a crush on me?” he asked. My face turned bright red. “Well I mean if you do that would be extremely good for me and I suppose you and maybe I could take you out for dinner.” I went behind Mr. D and said “We could just skip dinner and just go to the bedroom.” He grinned and said “Great idea, but will you give me a hand job right now?” I grinned. I was really exictied about doing it somewhere were people could see us. By surprise he took my hand and we started walking. We went to the mens room for me to do the deed. I kneeled down and took my shirt off. I could see how hard Mr. D was already. I unzipped his pants and took an 8 inch dick out of his boxers. I looked up and smiled saying “ Be careful with me tonight….I don’t want to get hurt with this big thing.” I opened my mouth and licked the head of his dick then took a deep throat of dick. I slid my lips up and down his huge cock licking and cupping his balls in my hands. He was moaning and has to sit down on the toilet. “O fuck yes, damn it!” I laughed “Ssshhh, don’t be too loud!” His balls were now in his mouth and I was giving him a hand job when suddenly he said almost in a wisper “I need to cum, I am going to start to cum.” and my lips covered his dick. I got a huge mouth full and it kept coming. When I thought he couldn’t have any cum left I opened my mouth for him to see but he came on my face. “Shit M, I’m sorry.” I just smiled and took the cum that went on my face and undid my bra and rubbed my tits. He came down to kiss me and we shared his cum that was in my mouth. “Ok, I am ready for tonight, have you done that before M?” “No, it’s my first time however I did pratice blowjobs on veggies at home.” He grinned, “before we go can I see how tight you are?” “Well ok sure Mr. D” I layed on the ground and he undid my pants and took my thong off to the side. I was drenched with cum but when he put his finger in me I yelped. “M, my god! Your so tight!” “Well I’ll get some lube and condoms Mr D.” “Ok, M you get the lube but not any condoms.” He smacked my bare ass and we cleaned up.

So there I was standing in the mirror of the bathroom in the hotel were I was going to get my first fuck. I was there flat bellied, nice ass, and long legs. I was wearing a black corset with pink trimming with a matching thong. I had on my fish nets and black high heels. To top it all off I had a tie on. I had to say to myself “I look fucking hot.” I walked out of the bathroom and his jaw dropped. “Can I, um, take, um pictures of you M?” “Here.” I threw my digital camera at him. I did standard poses tie between my legs, me with my ass bent over spanking myself. I gave Mr D a lap dance. He was in awe. “Why are you so amazed Mr. D?” “Well, I haven’t done this before. Well I have but not with someone who could be in Playboy.” I just smiled. I knew I was the best he had and he knew I knew. He began taking all my clothes off until I was just in my heels and tie. I pushed him onto the bed and unbuttoned his shirt. His hands went up to touch my boobs and he cupped them like he hadn’t seen boobs before. I had him naked and he looked like a horny teen, and I liked that. I took my tie off and rubbed it between my legs. I got it all wet and whispered “Lick it.” He licked all the cum off and managed to jack himself off.

He fucked me every way. He went to put his dick in me and I screamed. It was the most painful thing I ever felt. “M, are you OK?” “Mmmhmmm” I was in tears of pleasure but it hurt. “Here let us lube up.” He did it and then took me in missionary style “O fuck Morgan! Your so fucking tight!” I did everything doggy, up against the wall, sixty nined, etc.

He gave me my first orgasm. “M, I want to take you out. You know how to fuck but damn it I want to be with you.” “What about your wife Mr. D?” “Well, she’s a bicth and I just married her because she said she was pregnant. You have a boyfriend anyways M…..” I interrupted quickly “But I don’t like him physically.’’ Seven months passed. We are still together and every morning when I wake up he gives me head….fuck life is great.
 
And we are supposed to do what with this?

Posting it here, you seem to be asking for feedback. Here it is. Sorry if I seem brutal. Just being honest.

Numerous spelling and grammar errors...
The third and fourth paragraphs are too long for display on a monitor and to be read. I was skipping/skimming by the third line in the second one.

Why not use names instead of initials? it's distracting. I made that mistake. Once.

Anyway. Kinda short isn't it? I saw this over in Story Ideas. It might be a good start to a story, but needs a lot of work yet.

You need an editor and to want to do something besides write a story in five minutes...

Stories are usually submitted through the submission page you get when you log in from the main page. Then after review, they get posted along with the rest. You might want to check out some of the FAQs on this site.

:rose:

Welcome to Lit.

MJL
 
Yeah... find some older, seasoned writer to give you some ideas about expanding this from the viginette it is to a real story.

Then go to the Editor's Forum and find an editor. Posted as it is, you get trashed.

PM me if you want. I might be able to help you.
 
Great Start

Cheeky, this is better than most people give you credit for. A diamond in the rough, so to speak. I love the energy and pace of this story; it has raw jagged edges that cut deep in places. Some of the critiques are valid, both in this forum and some of the others I've seen your posts in: you've got to break up the paragraphs, work on the dialogue, develop the character a little more. I will send you a PM, if you want, I could help you edit/revise.
 
TMKelley76 said:
Cheeky, this is better than most people give you credit for. A diamond in the rough, so to speak. I love the energy and pace of this story; it has raw jagged edges that cut deep in places. Some of the critiques are valid, both in this forum and some of the others I've seen your posts in: you've got to break up the paragraphs, work on the dialogue, develop the character a little more. I will send you a PM, if you want, I could help you edit/revise.
Yeah, between the tense switching, punctuation errors, impossibly long paragraphs and complete lack of motivation, it was not bad. :rolleyes:
 
My Fantasy

“God, this feels so good.” I though as I was standing behind the counter with is dick pressed against my ass. As he went to open the cash drawer I softly told him “Do you press your hard dick against everyone or is this just for me?” He grinned and replied “Only for a sexy girl like you.”

The person I am describing is my fucking hot boss. He’s quite a bit older around 30 while I am 18. I have always been the girl who has a crush on the teacher or some older guy so this wasn’t to surprising when I thought this up. At this point if he asked me, I would fuck him as hard as he wanted and blow him till he cummed. He’s not good looking just an overweight middle aged man, but he makes my pussy wet.

I went into the office to clock out and saw Mr. D sitting there. “M do you have a crush on me?” he asked. My face turned bright red. “Well I mean if you do that would be extremely good for me and I suppose you and maybe I could take you out for dinner.” I went behind Mr. D and said “We could just skip dinner and just go to the bedroom.” He grinned and said “Great idea, but will you give me a hand job right now?” I grinned. I was really exictied about doing it somewhere were people could see us. By surprise he took my hand and we started walking. We went to the mens room for me to do the deed. I kneeled down and took my shirt off. I could see how hard Mr. D was already. I unzipped his pants and took an 8 inch dick out of his boxers. I looked up and smiled saying “ Be careful with me tonight….I don’t want to get hurt with this big thing.” I opened my mouth and licked the head of his dick then took a deep throat of dick. I slid my lips up and down his huge cock licking and cupping his balls in my hands. He was moaning and has to sit down on the toilet. “O fuck yes, damn it!” I laughed “Ssshhh, don’t be too loud!” His balls were now in his mouth and I was giving him a hand job when suddenly he said almost in a wisper “I need to cum, I am going to start to cum.” and my lips covered his dick. I got a huge mouth full and it kept coming. When I thought he couldn’t have any cum left I opened my mouth for him to see but he came on my face. “Shit M, I’m sorry.” I just smiled and took the cum that went on my face and undid my bra and rubbed my tits. He came down to kiss me and we shared his cum that was in my mouth. “Ok, I am ready for tonight, have you done that before M?” “No, it’s my first time however I did pratice blowjobs on veggies at home.” He grinned, “before we go can I see how tight you are?” “Well ok sure Mr. D” I layed on the ground and he undid my pants and took my thong off to the side. I was drenched with cum but when he put his finger in me I yelped. “M, my god! Your so tight!” “Well I’ll get some lube and condoms Mr D.” “Ok, M you get the lube but not any condoms.” He smacked my bare ass and we cleaned up.

So there I was standing in the mirror of the bathroom in the hotel were I was going to get my first fuck. I was there flat bellied, nice ass, and long legs. I was wearing a black corset with pink trimming with a matching thong. I had on my fish nets and black high heels. To top it all off I had a tie on. I had to say to myself “I look fucking hot.” I walked out of the bathroom and his jaw dropped. “Can I, um, take, um pictures of you M?” “Here.” I threw my digital camera at him. I did standard poses tie between my legs, me with my ass bent over spanking myself. I gave Mr D a lap dance. He was in awe. “Why are you so amazed Mr. D?” “Well, I haven’t done this before. Well I have but not with someone who could be in Playboy.” I just smiled. I knew I was the best he had and he knew I knew. He began taking all my clothes off until I was just in my heels and tie. I pushed him onto the bed and unbuttoned his shirt. His hands went up to touch my boobs and he cupped them like he hadn’t seen boobs before. I had him naked and he looked like a horny teen, and I liked that. I took my tie off and rubbed it between my legs. I got it all wet and whispered “Lick it.” He licked all the cum off and managed to jack himself off.

He fucked me every way. He went to put his dick in me and I screamed. It was the most painful thing I ever felt. “M, are you OK?” “Mmmhmmm” I was in tears of pleasure but it hurt. “Here let us lube up.” He did it and then took me in missionary style “O fuck Morgan! Your so fucking tight!” I did everything doggy, up against the wall, sixty nined, etc.

He gave me my first orgasm. “M, I want to take you out. You know how to fuck but damn it I want to be with you.” “What about your wife Mr. D?” “Well, she’s a bicth and I just married her because she said she was pregnant. You have a boyfriend anyways M…..” I interrupted quickly “But I don’t like him physically.’’ Seven months passed. We are still together and every morning when I wake up he gives me head….fuck life is great.

This is awesome! Being a somewhat older guy, this sort of stuff DOES happen with younger women. Just wish I was closer to YOU! :rose:
 
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