Bloodlust

[loquere]

Nerd Bob is a neighbour with a sexy fit babe Tracy, who shows no interest in him as she's married. One night Tracy catches her husband cheating, and kills him. Bob smitten with her reluctantly agrees to be her alibi.

Furthermore Tracy seduces Bob into a relationship, later on convincing him to murder someone with her so he'll have as much to loose as her, so she can trust him. They have sex after the murder, gaining his full loyalty. Bob gains her affection for taking life.

This becomes there thing over and over, murdering a target then having passionate love. Tracy initially plans on murdering Bob until she finds out she's pregnant with his child. This seals there bond, and her loyalty to him.

 

[Hypoxia]

That's a grim premise leading down dark paths. My first concern was how to turn Bob from a presumably passive nerd to an active serial murderer. But that's easy; the author merely writes, "Something awoke inside him, a deep force he had never know before -- he felt Power!" I've seen that in a zillion horror comix. But the story needs a Crypt Of Horror twist ending where they get their just desserts.

Straight ending: Yes, pregnancy bonds them. They cannot stop their murder spree; it's just too much fun. For more thrills, they screw outdoors afterwards. One warm evening, another murder, and they adjourn to a cemetery to desecrate the dead with sex. They're fucking away atop a grave's slab... and the massive headstone topples and crushes them. Squish! No magic required; they're in a seismic zone and a sharp temblor knocked over a few things. Yes, the earth moves under them for their climactic climax.

Ghoulish ending: They're screwing in the cemetery... and the outraged dead rise from their unquiet graves for cold vengeance. (Turns out one of their victims is buried there.) They're violated and devoured by zombis, maybe even zombified themselves. For even more ghoulishness, the murderess is almost at term, and delivers when the zombis attack. A zombi woman snatches up the baby and nurses it from her zombi-breast. The child is raised by zombis. I don't know where the story goes from there.

Your turn.

 

[FantasyXY]

Sounds like two perfect psychos for the Criminal Minds TV show.

To make this interesting, maybe they fuck their victims before they kill.

 

[Hypoxia]

Sounds like two perfect psychos for the Criminal Minds TV show.

I'm not familiar. But there are certainly precedents like Starkweather and Crane.

To make this interesting, maybe they fuck their victims before they kill.

Y'know, that idea flashed across my mind but I forgot to mention it. Thanks for bringing it up. Yes, that's logical. They troll bars for prospects (M or F) for a bi 3-way, strangle the sucker, etc. Author must work out whether they operate from home, from cheap motels, from an RV, etc -- do they stay local or are they a roadshow? Maybe they fuck their victims in the back seat of a minivan, have dependable places to dispose of bodies, and celebrate with public fucks afterward.

The critical point is body disposal and thus story setting. Dump bodies down a mineshaft, or weighted off an ocean pier, or processed in a dogfood factory, or what? We need someplace discreet. Their murderous success depends on staying off the police radar, not leaving a trail of bodies laying around drawing attention. Just more mysterious disappearances. Happens all the time, etc.

 

[loquere]

Sounds like two perfect psychos for the Criminal Minds TV show.

To make this interesting, maybe they fuck their victims before they kill.

Actually in my mind the first murder did follow this method.

 

[loquere]

There is also a muder sex element to this story that will appear in further chapters.

 

[Hypoxia]

There is also a muder sex element to this story that will appear in further chapters.

So this isn't a morality tale where they get their just desserts? Just an endless stream of sex murders? Interesting kink. I wonder how the comments would run.

Remember LIT's snuff rule. I had a story pulled because of complaints of a non-sex death -- I had to revise it slightly to emphasize it was NOT snuff. Be careful with mutilation and mayhem, too. I had to revise another story to show the narrator only *considering* self-mutilation (trephanation). So, make sure all deaths are clean and non-sexual.

 

[loquere]

So this isn't a morality tale where they get their just desserts? Just an endless stream of sex murders? Interesting kink. I wonder how the comments would run.

Remember LIT's snuff rule. I had a story pulled because of complaints of a non-sex death -- I had to revise it slightly to emphasize it was NOT snuff. Be careful with mutilation and mayhem, too. I had to revise another story to show the narrator only *considering* self-mutilation (trephanation). So, make sure all deaths are clean and non-sexual.

Sex and death will be key. The nerd character Bob turns into a super-villain. It'll be a long long long series, leading to Bob's domination of mother earth.

 

[loquere]

I said this on another thread in the AH, if I give a full outline I can't write the thing. So when I write this epic, I'll post a link here. It'll be a ridiculous grand tale.