Bi males or Bi curious males

[jeninflorida]

I need your help. I just posted a story where the husband starts to explore his sexuality, well his wife helped push things along. Can you give me some feedback as to what you like or disliked? also, what can I do to make the story better?

http://www.literotica.com/s/hollys-night-out-1

part 2 will post tomorrow.

thanks Jen

 

[hubbyhomealone]

I need your help. I just posted a story where the husband starts to explore his sexuality, well his wife helped push things along. Can you give me some feedback as to what you like or disliked? also, what can I do to make the story better?

http://www.literotica.com/s/hollys-night-out-1

part 2 will post tomorrow.

thanks Jen

Very good story... got me horny..and wanting more!

 

[Baker St. Muse]

I need your help. I just posted a story where the husband starts to explore his sexuality, well his wife helped push things along. Can you give me some feedback as to what you like or disliked? also, what can I do to make the story better?

http://www.literotica.com/s/hollys-night-out-1

part 2 will post tomorrow.

thanks Jen

Hi, Jen!

I really enjoyed the story you posted. The setting and subject were quite arousing. I did notice that there were some things that could be cleaned up a bit, like proper use of commas and word use ("ridged" instead of "rigid," for example.) But overall it's a good story idea. Thanks for sharing it!

 

[whywouldi]

Very good story; I gave it a 5; i'll be waiting for part 2 impatiently !

 

[BiInMyMind]

Very hot. The cock-sucking came naturally and made me very hard.

Some notes:

Too early to mention the thought of kissing the other man; should be later when things get physical (if at all):
"I didn't want to kiss him but I was curious about his body."

steeling glances should be stealing glances

Holly reached out and put her hand on my arm, "I think he would be a great guy for you."

See if he can have this in his mind when he’s wondering what will happen when they decide to go for a night cap – like “I dared not think through what she had in mind,” or “I didn’t want to really think through what she had in mind, I found myself going with the flow.”

In the bedroom – fill in Holly having Mike get naked and onto the bed – the action jumps here

Doesn’t seem quite right she “never” thought – she must have had an inkling:
Holly moved closer and started to tease my ear with her tongue, "Oh, Baby, I love you so much. I never thought you would do something like that; you can't imagine how turned on I am."

 

[jeninflorida]

Very good story... got me horny..and wanting more!

thanks, hope you liked part 2

 

[hottchic]

I need your help. I just posted a story where the husband starts to explore his sexuality, well his wife helped push things along. Can you give me some feedback as to what you like or disliked? also, what can I do to make the story better?

http://www.literotica.com/s/hollys-night-out-1

part 2 will post tomorrow.

thanks Jen

I liked this story and the way you wrote it, but as I said in my comment, there really needs to be a bi catagory in Lit, in fact I fail to understand why there isn't one.

I even posted about this and other people have told me that it has been requested before.

My personal experience is that this particular scenario of seeing their husband or boyfriend with another man is very popular with bi women.

 

[elfin_odalisque]

hottchic, group sex and erotic couplings do cover bi- stories. You bump into several FFM and even MMF bi-encounters on group sex. Personally, I'd vote for reducing the cats as I'd prefer a little pinch of several perversions and a touch of surprise to titillate.

Jen, ch.2 is not a sequel to ch.1. The first part was a lovely vignette starting a story of male bi-sexuality but the second was a plain cuckold story with a dominant female humiliating her husband. The two errors, IMO, were not playing on 'I's removal of panties with his wife teasing him about what could happen. Instead you let his fantasies prevail which made the 'scene' more humiliating than perhaps you intended. Again, the sex scene where he is effectively blindfolfed (accentuated by the phone often falling on the floor) is not a loving ménage-á-trois but forced submission.

I've got no problem with cuckold stories but you said you were writing something different. Showing 'I' his bisexual side surely needs more cuddly stuff between the couple?

PS: Edited to add that Ch.2 has a load of editing errors - minor but annoying.

 

[hottchic]

hottchic, group sex and erotic couplings do cover bi- stories. You bump into several FFM and even MMF bi-encounters on group sex. Personally, I'd vote for reducing the cats as I'd prefer a little pinch of several perversions and a touch of surprise to titillate.

Personally elfin I would not be for reducing the number of catagories.

Personally I do not write on Lit to get verbally abused and I am really glad that there is a Transgender catagory because I think if you put the stories anywhere else they would get ripped apart because of their content as most people do not feel comfortable with these types of stories.

A good example of a catagory where people get trashed for writing anything away from conventional sex is the loving wives catagory. You can bank on the fact that even if I write a very conventional story, I won't put it in that catagory. Getting torn apart in a shark feeding frenzy is not my idea of fun.

In the transgender catagory we get a lot people who are curious about it coming to read, but at least they have an idea what they will be letting themselves in for.

My point is clear, look at the GLBT community for a minute, we have a GAY catagory, we have a LESBIAN catagory and we have a TRANSGENDER catagory. Where is the BISEXUAL catagory?

 

[sr71plt]

I just don't post many bisexual stories to Lit., because, as you post, there's no category for it with an audience that won't criticize it just for being bisexual. The "Group" category readers don't accept MMF. It isn't about where it can conceivably be posted; it's about where it will be at least neutrally received.

 

[elfin_odalisque]

hottchick,sr, I must apologise.

I thought there were sufficient cats on Lit cope with bi-fiction but I realise I am wrong.

 

[jeninflorida]

wow, I have to admit that I was shocked (in a good way) the number of emails I received from "Holly's night out"

only a few trolls which was great!