redzinger
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I'd really appreciate if someone could read through a 27k novella for me please. It's a Domme story, written from the female's viewpoint, where she meets and trains two submissives. To give you a taste of what she is like, I'll let Lindsay speak for herself:
‘I’m not a Bitch. I don’t want to humiliate you, that doesn’t interest me. I don’t want to crush your spirit; when you submit to my control, it is essential for me that you are here of your own free will. I’m not interested in having a slave cooking my every meal, although I’d love for you to do the washing-up and clean up after yourselves, including the toys we use. I’ll have sex with you, many Dommes don’t, some don’t even allow their subs to orgasm.’
I'm not after an editor (hence this not being in the editing forum), more of a beta reader experienced in BDSM to pick up anything that doesn't 'chime' correctly. There's mentions of collaring, presentation, some toys that I've only ever seen online rather than in real life, that kind of thing, as well as the emotional balance. I'm not that experienced and want to get this story right, to properly represent both emotional and physical aspects.
Please PM me. (If anyone did respond earlier when I asked elsewhere, I must have missed it and I apologise, I've had a hectic last month.)
If you want to get a taster for what she's like, the first third is here with the first 'scene' starting from page 2:
http://www.literotica.com/s/playing-power-games
(but I've rewritten parts since publishing on Lit, I would send you the updated version)
Thank you for reading. Any thoughts also much appreciated.
Tx
‘I’m not a Bitch. I don’t want to humiliate you, that doesn’t interest me. I don’t want to crush your spirit; when you submit to my control, it is essential for me that you are here of your own free will. I’m not interested in having a slave cooking my every meal, although I’d love for you to do the washing-up and clean up after yourselves, including the toys we use. I’ll have sex with you, many Dommes don’t, some don’t even allow their subs to orgasm.’
I'm not after an editor (hence this not being in the editing forum), more of a beta reader experienced in BDSM to pick up anything that doesn't 'chime' correctly. There's mentions of collaring, presentation, some toys that I've only ever seen online rather than in real life, that kind of thing, as well as the emotional balance. I'm not that experienced and want to get this story right, to properly represent both emotional and physical aspects.
Please PM me. (If anyone did respond earlier when I asked elsewhere, I must have missed it and I apologise, I've had a hectic last month.)
If you want to get a taster for what she's like, the first third is here with the first 'scene' starting from page 2:
http://www.literotica.com/s/playing-power-games
(but I've rewritten parts since publishing on Lit, I would send you the updated version)
Thank you for reading. Any thoughts also much appreciated.
Tx
