Bare assed---flapping in the breeze

[garyblue]

Fair's fair. I have, on occassion, taken potshots on the fori. In the interest of justice, I hereby hoist mine own self upon the petard I have built for others.

This story hit the list today, 12/01/01, and shows to have 7,600 views and 45 votes (unseemly numbers). And, it has had one feedback that I owe a thank-you.

I can tell you that writing is very much more difficult than editing. It's very much more fun, too.

So, here it is, my first little dingus (not counting my limerick that everyone ignored), that says, "garyblue's a published author."

Take your best shot at "Sherry's Sitting."

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=30546

g

ps. That limerick thing hurt my feelings. Does anyone realize how few words rhyme with `taco?'

pps. I mean really hurt.

 

[lovetoread]

Great Job,Mr G!

I loved it,sent the feedback to you.

 

[weathered2]

Extremely hot. Well written. Super story idea. You've done well, "Grasshopper".

 

[English-Passion]

Hi garyblue.

I just read your story and I must say it is excellent. Strongly actice voice, good dialogue, descriptive sex without becoming clinical.

My only criticism, and I am clutching at straws a bit to find something to say, is that you make limited use of the five senses. Smells, sounds and tastes are very important in building atmosphere, and I fel that the eroticism could have been heightened with more of these.

Despite that bit of nitpicking, I score it a solid 5.

Best wishes,

English-Passion