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[Senna Jawa]

OK, I hope that by now everybody is thoroughly tired by bitchings about ratings Let's have a constructive off-shot of the thread about that horrible unabombing or whatever .

If theognis has nothing against it, let's have a discussion of his poem

carolina by theognis​

Furthermore, if you know of any poems which somehow associate with this one, we may discuss them too. Let me even suggest one, or even two:

summer phone by Senna Jawa​

[splash...] by Senna Jawa​

 

[Senna Jawa]

multi-dimensional considerations

This thread may give us a pretext to forget about the one-dimensional rating. Instead we may propose all kind of axis. For instance:

• originality
• composition
• technical quality
• vividness of the images
• impact on a reader
• melodicity of the text
• mood
• quality of language
• artistic purity of the poem
• etc.

 

[Epmd607]

I like the poem. It's more of an epithet, if not an epigram. However, a voice like molasses is slightly stale. I recommend a second verse about the man in the interaction, from the woman's perspective, something offbeat to offset the slightly stale descriptor in the first stanza

 

[twelveoone]

OK, I hope that by now everybody is thoroughly tired by bitchings about ratings Let's have a constructive off-shot of the thread about that horrible unabombing or whatever .

If theognis has nothing against it, let's have a discussion of his poem

carolina by theognis​

Furthermore, if you know of any poems which somehow associate with this one, we may discuss them too. Let me even suggest one, or even two:

summer phone by Senna Jawa​

[splash...] by Senna Jawa​

Unless you have his permission, I object.

 

[theognis]

Unless you have his permission, I object.

Permission granted.