Artificial Limbs ~ Feedback Very Much Appreciated!!!

[PrincessKate0712]

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[Trixareforkids]

I quite like it, though this line:

"When there is so much pain on the inside, the only way to let it out it pain on the outside."

Feels like it needs editing, the "it pain on the outside" portion.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

Long poems don't usually hold me to the end, yours did. It was very moving just as it is, although as already mentioned it needs editing. But it feels like it was written straight from the heart. I hope we read more from you soon.