Anyone want to read my newest chapter and let me know why it's not getting good ratin

[CoffeeWithMonkeys]

I'm new to Literotica, my first short story did a decent job here so I decided to post a longer story.
I split it into 4 parts to submit it here.
Part one has had a lot of views, ratings have been pretty good. Got some comments which I love, they let me know what works, what doesn't.
Part two has had a lot less views, only one comment, but the ratings were higher. So ok, I felt confident to submit part three.
It's just kind of sitting there. It has only been up today, it's new, but it seems to not be a good follow up for one and two maybe.
Just curious if people are bored with my couple, or if this part is just lacking something.

Also this story was longer so I split it up, but should I maybe have just submitted as one long story? It probably would have been about 8 pages, so not really long, but I thought splitting it up would make it more manageable to read.

Anyway if anyone has any thoughts I'd love to hear them.
Thanks!

 

[JLCC]

I haven't read your stories, but I've been told it is just a feature of multi-chapter stories. My most recent two chapter story went from 64k reads on ch. 1 to 19k on ch 2. Others follow a similar pattern.

While my stories are rated well, they don't elicit much reaction.

 

[CoffeeWithMonkeys]

I haven't read your stories, but I've been told it is just a feature of multi-chapter stories. My most recent two chapter story went from 64k reads on ch. 1 to 19k on ch 2. Others follow a similar pattern.

While my stories are rated well, they don't elicit much reaction.

I was wondering if it was something like that. Maybe next time I will just submit a longer story as one piece if for nothing else than to see if it gets better ratings.

Thanks!

 

[ElectricBlue]

I had a quick scan of the third part, but didn't finish, didn't go back to the first two parts.

That's the issue, I think - it's clearly a continuation of an episodic story but with nothing to pull a new reader into the chapter. So you're seeing the typical pattern of higher reads for the first part, and rapidly dropping reader numbers for the later parts. For example, I have an EH story cycle with 25k on the first chapter, 12k on the second, and about 3k loyal readers who stay through to the end (23 chapters) - but the whole thing has an underlying plot slowly getting resolved, and a mix up of different sex each chapter. I figure that's what the 3k readers stuck around for - to find out how I was going to wrap it all up (it turns into a shaggy dog story with all sorts of plot twists that I didn't see coming).

Time for a new story, I reckon. You can always come back to this one if you want to.

 

[CoffeeWithMonkeys]

I had a quick scan of the third part, but didn't finish, didn't go back to the first two parts.

That's the issue, I think - it's clearly a continuation of an episodic story but with nothing to pull a new reader into the chapter. So you're seeing the typical pattern of higher reads for the first part, and rapidly dropping reader numbers for the later parts. For example, I have an EH story cycle with 25k on the first chapter, 12k on the second, and about 3k loyal readers who stay through to the end (23 chapters) - but the whole thing has an underlying plot slowly getting resolved, and a mix up of different sex each chapter. I figure that's what the 3k readers stuck around for - to find out how I was going to wrap it all up (it turns into a shaggy dog story with all sorts of plot twists that I didn't see coming).

Time for a new story, I reckon. You can always come back to this one if you want to.

This is one I wrote about a year ago, so it's already finished. And I've already submitted the final part to hopefully be posted soon for anyone that wants to see how it ends.

Next time I'll just post a whole story, see if it does better that way.

Thanks!

 

[StrangeTamer]

I just read Ch 2. I liked it, 3 wasn't listed when I clicked on 2, I'll go read that one now.

 

[CoffeeWithMonkeys]

I just read Ch 2. I liked it, 3 wasn't listed when I clicked on 2, I'll go read that one now.

Thanks!
They're all listed in my signature, not sure why it isn't showing with 2.

If you have any critique, let me know

 

[StrangeTamer]

It was there now, I enjoyed this one to. Your writing makes an affair seem so clean and right lol. I'm new at this but I didn't notice anything wrong with 2 or 3, at least nothing glaring jumped out ta me.

 

[Kantarii]

As a general observation, I have noticed that the first chapter of any storyline I have posted tends to have higher views than the rest of the chapters, but as the chapters get higher, the views go down. There is a spike in the ratings as well for the higher chapters. I tend to want to believe that as the storyline progresses, those that are following it are the ones that have done so from the beginning and the ones not interested tend to weed themselves out. I won't swear this is the truth, but for the most part it may be true.

I also notice that the way I have described the chapter in one little sentence when submitting it that that has a small influence on getting the story read by others. I can't stress it enough, but the title of a story tends to catch people's eyes as well. I know tons of books I have read or bought based against a catchy title revealed a crappy story. And I probably overlooked a great deal of great stories because the title sucked and didn't catch my interest. Human thinking is kinda funny about that in a sense.

Just a few suggestions and observations. Kant

 

[CoffeeWithMonkeys]

It was there now, I enjoyed this one to. Your writing makes an affair seem so clean and right lol. I'm new at this but I didn't notice anything wrong with 2 or 3, at least nothing glaring jumped out ta me.

LOL!Thanks, I guess that's what I was going for. I really like this couple, and might use their general characters in another story. Also because when I use new characters I get confused who is with whom, doing what with whom and all that!

 

[CoffeeWithMonkeys]

As a general observation, I have noticed that the first chapter of any storyline I have posted tends to have higher views than the rest of the chapters, but as the chapters get higher, the views go down. There is a spike in the ratings as well for the higher chapters. I tend to want to believe that as the storyline progresses, those that are following it are the ones that have done so from the beginning and the ones not interested tend to weed themselves out. I won't swear this is the truth, but for the most part it may be true.

I also notice that the way I have described the chapter in one little sentence when submitting it that that has a small influence on getting the story read by others. I can't stress it enough, but the title of a story tends to catch people's eyes as well. I know tons of books I have read or bought based against a catchy title revealed a crappy story. And I probably overlooked a great deal of great stories because the title sucked and didn't catch my interest. Human thinking is kinda funny about that in a sense.

Just a few suggestions and observations. Kant

I think you're right on all of that! Seems like those who are interested and still reading seem to like the later chapters and now good ratings are coming despite the low views.
I mean chapter 1 has over 12000 views where 2 I think has maybe 2000 views. Of course it's only been up for a few days.

Thanks, sometimes I need some reassurance and hand holding.

 

[Kantarii]

I think you're right on all of that! Seems like those who are interested and still reading seem to like the later chapters and now good ratings are coming despite the low views.
I mean chapter 1 has over 12000 views where 2 I think has maybe 2000 views. Of course it's only been up for a few days.

Thanks, sometimes I need some reassurance and hand holding.

I try to submit my stories around Tuesday/ Wednesday. That way they pass the pending process and are visible around Friday morning. Just in time for the weekend traffic to read the story where it is at the top of the headlines and not half way down the board. But, that's my wacky, fucked up, artificial feminine thinking as an author on this site. Someone will sue me, I'm sure. Kant



How comfortable are you with having a guy in a skirt and makeup holding your hand? You know I'm just funning with you

 

[CoffeeWithMonkeys]

I try to submit my stories around Tuesday/ Wednesday. That way they pass the pending process and are visible around Friday morning. Just in time for the weekend traffic to read the story where it is at the top of the headlines and not half way down the board. But, that's my wacky, fucked up, artificial feminine thinking as an author on this site. Someone will sue me, I'm sure. Kant



How comfortable are you with having a guy in a skirt and makeup holding your hand? You know I'm just funning with you

I like the idea of submitting Tuesday/Wednesday and it being available for the weekend, sounds like a plan that makes sense.
I know for chapter 1 it ended up as the first story listed in EC so I think just for that reason it got a lot of views.

I have no problem holding your hand, unless your skirt is cuter than mine because then I'll be jealous!

 

[Kantarii]

I like the idea of submitting Tuesday/Wednesday and it being available for the weekend, sounds like a plan that makes sense.
I know for chapter 1 it ended up as the first story listed in EC so I think just for that reason it got a lot of views.

I have no problem holding your hand, unless your skirt is cuter than mine because then I'll be jealous!

Something else I have tried to refrain from doing. If I have a story already in the headlines people are reading in a specific category, I won't post the next chapter of the story until the previous chapter has left the headlines. I've just started doing that. Why? Because my new story is added into the batch of new stories that will help push the previous story off the headlines. In a way it's like I'm shooting myself in the foot. The idea is to keep the story on the board a bit longer for views, comments, and votes. I hope that is making sense?

I got away with posting all 6 chapters of "My Brother's Ghost" in Erotic Horror because so few people post in that category. I was rushing myself when I first came to the site and I'm not actually happy with myself or my first inexperienced storyline despite it's 4.0+ rating.

I'm also in the process of updating it and embellishing it as well as correcting punctuation errors and adding my "writing style" I have developed to it.

Oh, and, by the way it's a black leather skirt I have a black polysatin on too with a v slit in the rear
Kant

 

[EnglishTeacher]

Yeah, I have to agree with everyone here. Multi-chapter series are like a TV show. The first episode everyone takes a peak at to see if its their thing, and then you keep the ones interested in the following chapters.

Why a continuation drop instead of one big spike? Some people give it a chapter or two to see if they will keep going or drop it entirely, leaving you with the diehards the further along it goes.

 

[ontheroadforever]

Interesting...

I'll be up front. Your beginning in Chapter one was bad. Horrible. Worse, it was boring! I almost shut it down right there.

I'm glad I didn't. While I thought she gave in with way too little argument, I kinda like it. It's improbable, it smells of complete cheesiness, and there's no way this happens out there. It's totally not even related to what could happen in real life.

Maybe I'm getting sentimental in my old age, but I do like it.

I didn't really notice any glaring punctuation errors, or any errors that really grabbed my attention. The sex is understated, which may be the reason you're not getting higher scores. That, or the pure cheesiness...

 

[CoffeeWithMonkeys]

I'll be up front. Your beginning in Chapter one was bad. Horrible. Worse, it was boring! I almost shut it down right there.

I'm glad I didn't. While I thought she gave in with way too little argument, I kinda like it. It's improbable, it smells of complete cheesiness, and there's no way this happens out there. It's totally not even related to what could happen in real life.

Maybe I'm getting sentimental in my old age, but I do like it.

I didn't really notice any glaring punctuation errors, or any errors that really grabbed my attention. The sex is understated, which may be the reason you're not getting higher scores. That, or the pure cheesiness...

I write first and foremost for me and my best friend. I always set out to write something so dirty...but my results are always this cheesy romantic crap!

I don't understand it. I want to be dirty, I am dirty, but I can't write dirty for some reason :/

Should I just give in and accept that's all I can write? Hehehe Hey at least it's good cheese though isn't it?

 

[NOIRTRASH]

I've been with lotsa women during my life, and I believe all of them fuck for different outcomes, almost every time they go to bat. Men fuck for one outcome.

When I worked as a psychotherapist women told me they do sex for diverse outcomes. Even lesbian sex.

So sex stories are likely to come with diverse outcomes and sundry plots.

 

[CoffeeWithMonkeys]

I've been with lotsa women during my life, and I believe all of them fuck for different outcomes, almost every time they go to bat. Men fuck for one outcome.

When I worked as a psychotherapist women told me they do sex for diverse outcomes. Even lesbian sex.

So sex stories are likely to come with diverse outcomes and sundry plots.

Maybe that's my problem with writing so called erotica, confession, I've only ever been with my now ex husband. That's it! Maybe that's why what I write always turns into romantic drivel!

I will say, I'm sad to see my latest chapter that just went up a couple hours ago is getting pretty crummy ratings, but I think that's because people don't like how it ends, and it is the final chapter...

But all you can do is continue to write to please yourself and hope someone else enjoys it. I started a new story yesterday for my best friend. Since she lives in another country she was asleep while I wrote. I sent her the first chapter, waited patiently for her to wake up, read it and let me know what she thought. It is so different from what I usually write so I was worried she would find it silly,but she loves it! So YAY!

 

[NOIRTRASH]

Maybe that's my problem with writing so called erotica, confession, I've only ever been with my now ex husband. That's it! Maybe that's why what I write always turns into romantic drivel!

I will say, I'm sad to see my latest chapter that just went up a couple hours ago is getting pretty crummy ratings, but I think that's because people don't like how it ends, and it is the final chapter...

But all you can do is continue to write to please yourself and hope someone else enjoys it. I started a new story yesterday for my best friend. Since she lives in another country she was asleep while I wrote. I sent her the first chapter, waited patiently for her to wake up, read it and let me know what she thought. It is so different from what I usually write so I was worried she would find it silly,but she loves it! So YAY!

I read the end and scored it 5 stars.

Romance aint my thang but there's nothing major wrong with your writing. Its all coherent and cohesive and logical and mainstream. It ought to be popular.

Lemme ask the question once more. No answer required. WHO EXACTLY DO YOU WANT TO LOVE YOUR WRITING?

I recommend you find a trusted reviewer who's honest, and let them give you feedback.

 

[CoffeeWithMonkeys]

I read the end and scored it 5 stars.

Romance aint my thang but there's nothing major wrong with your writing. Its all coherent and cohesive and logical and mainstream. It ought to be popular.

Lemme ask the question once more. No answer required. WHO EXACTLY DO YOU WANT TO LOVE YOUR WRITING?

I recommend you find a trusted reviewer who's honest, and let them give you feedback.

I think with the ending on this one, people will love it or hate it. I actually wasn't happy with it so I started a part 2, but then it got sappy and boring so it was never finished.
I WISH I could move past romantic drivel, but I can't seem to.

Who do I want to love my writing? I know you said you don't need and answer, but well...I have no idea!I let a handful of people read this story when I first wrote it, not quite a year ago, and they all really liked it. One person even came back the next day to say she couldn't get the pie eating man with the hickey out of her mind. She said it was such a sweet story that made her happy. So that made me happy!

I don't know who I would ever think I could trust to give me honest feedback. I get some decent comments here. My best friend reads nearly everything I write, and she loves what I write, but she will tell me if she doesn't like something, or it doesn't make sense to her. So I suppose I can trust her.

 

[StrangeTamer]

I just finished reading Ch.4, I normally don't read Erotic Couplings but I liked your story, you held my interest through all four chapters. I like the way you write and I'm looking forward to reading your future stories.

I think with the ending on this one, people will love it or hate it. I actually wasn't happy with it so I started a part 2, but then it got sappy and boring so it was never finished.
I WISH I could move past romantic drivel, but I can't seem to.

I liked the ending even tho I was hoping they would stay together. Now you have my hopes up for a part two, lol no you ended it here and that's where it can stay if that's where you want it. I wouldn't call what you write drivel I think you are very good at writing what you write.

 

[ontheroadforever]

I left you a comment...

Hope you like my comment. Ya did good, kid...

 

[ontheroadforever]

I think with the ending on this one, people will love it or hate it. I actually wasn't happy with it so I started a part 2, but then it got sappy and boring so it was never finished.
I WISH I could move past romantic drivel, but I can't seem to.

Who do I want to love my writing? I know you said you don't need and answer, but well...I have no idea!I let a handful of people read this story when I first wrote it, not quite a year ago, and they all really liked it. One person even came back the next day to say she couldn't get the pie eating man with the hickey out of her mind. She said it was such a sweet story that made her happy. So that made me happy!

I don't know who I would ever think I could trust to give me honest feedback. I get some decent comments here. My best friend reads nearly everything I write, and she loves what I write, but she will tell me if she doesn't like something, or it doesn't make sense to her. So I suppose I can trust her.

I'll add this. Noir would probably agree, or at least I think he might.

Write for you. If you like it, then that should be good enough. Trust me, there will be those who will anonymously flog you for their own reasons (not enough sex, not enough graphic sex, etc.), and some might have the wherewithal to state their handle. You can't please everyone.

If you're happy with what you write, anyone else that likes it is the cherry on top of the sundae...