Anybody interested in this?

[Naturist]

Hi. I'm a long time forum member and Literotica reader, but I've never posted a story.

Lately, though, I've been toying with a story about an overweight and unattractive 18 year old guy who's totally in love with a beautiful girl in his high school. He can't get any girl, much less his heartthrob.

As luck would have it, the son's father falls in love with the girl's mother... and the parents decide they want to spend a weekend together with their children to decide if they want to move in together.

The kicker is that the mother and daughter are full-time nudists. The main character of story has to deal with both his fantasy girl's nudity and his his own body image problems.

Obviously, since this is Literotica, some kind of sex is going to happen. I'm wondering a couple of things, though. One, is there any interest in reading stories about people who aren't super-attractive? Two, is this idea trite and been done to death already?

Oh, and if anybody else has ideas about this story should progress, I'd been interested in hearing about them. Right now, I'm thinking that girl who appears so stuck up at high school is a lot nicer and accepting than he expects. And a lot hornier.

 

[sirhugs]

I think this has potential

Clearly the ladies are not full time full time nudists - daughter must wear clothes to school, at least

And wouldn't dad know about this by now? that one I think you need to solve before you start writing.

"Ugly duckling" stories are classic, and that's what your boy is. so you should find an audience. I don't think this is trite, because though most of the elements are familiar, you mix them together and stir... a little baking, and you're done!

 

[sunandshadow]

An ugly duckling romance can certainly work, even as erotica; to make it work well I would make the story first person pov or close third pov from the guy's perspective, so the audience is seeing his inside more than his outside. Perhaps alternate his pov with the girl's. I think attractiveness is a relative thing - it wouldn't work very well if the girl thought the boy was unattractive, she has to think chubby guys are cute or maybe she gives him a makeover trying to make him be less of a social outcast or less embarrassing to be seen with, then finds herself unexpectedly liking the results and the fact that his personality is different than that of the guys she usually hangs out with.

 

[Black_Dahlia]

I also think incest stories have the benefit of having this ugly duckling scenario. I know this isn't strictly incest, but it has the same benefits, in that the guy gets to hang out (quite literally in this case) with a hot young girl who wouldn't normally look at him twice.

 

[Naturist]

Yeah... it's part of the story that this guy get to see his dream girl nude... something the other guys in school can only dream of.

And yes, part of it is that Dad has already seen his lover and her daughter nude. Even though the son is unsure about the whole thing, Dad assures him that both are very sweet. The son can't quite understand the whole thing... how his prissy dream girl is a nudist who will accept him as such.

Utltimately, I think, the story would resolve around her being a genuine nudist who doesn't judge people by their looks alone. The young guy in the story has to figure this out... it's so completely unknown to him that girls in high school might... just might... see beyond mere looks.

I don't know... the more I think of this story, the less capable I thinkl I am of pulling it off.

 

[Fantasies_only]

Yeah... it's part of the story that this guy get to see his dream girl nude... something the other guys in school can only dream of.

And yes, part of it is that Dad has already seen his lover and her daughter nude. Even though the son is unsure about the whole thing, Dad assures him that both are very sweet. The son can't quite understand the whole thing... how his prissy dream girl is a nudist who will accept him as such.

Utltimately, I think, the story would resolve around her being a genuine nudist who doesn't judge people by their looks alone. The young guy in the story has to figure this out... it's so completely unknown to him that girls in high school might... just might... see beyond mere looks.

I don't know... the more I think of this story, the less capable I thinkl I am of pulling it off.

Although I would tend to agree that the story would end abruptly, I think it can be taken further with the "ugly duckling" scenario.

This calls for a makeover of both looks and personality, giving him a much needed ego boost.
Being awkward in social settings has also made him sexually shy (masturbating virgin).
This would be part of his makeover as his would be girlfriend devirginizes him, and mom and sis help him with other fetishes he might find useful when dating.

Because his wife is feeling him in places that shouldn't be felt, the father gets jealous and has sex with the boy's girlfriend, but he's so mad he forgets she's his daughter.

 

[snoopercharmbrights]

... daughter must wear clothes to school, at least ...

NIS anyone? No - it would ruin the story.

... And wouldn't dad know about this by now? ...

Yes he knows, and yes he tried to tell his son. Do eighteen year olds ever listen to their parents?

... she gives him a makeover trying to make him be less of a social outcast or less embarrassing to be seen with ...

... since they will inevitably be seen together if they live in the same house. The cohabiting of their parents will be a major gossip point at school, even more so if they marry.

As to POV, it really has to be third person telepathic, because the opportunities for misunderstandings which can only be explained to readers by telling the characters' thoughts are totally delicious. For example:

"Do you want a lift to school?" he asked, thinking No chance, not with a nerd like me.

"Gee, that would save me some time, thanks," she replied, thinking Better not look too keen but it's another chance to work on him.

 

[emap]

You know darnit that whole nude in school thingy keeps popping into my head, I'm gonna have to sit down and figure out a story one of these decades.

Anyway bad snoopy having so little faith in the writing ability of whoever decides to write this. Not me, though maybe a decade or two from now I can start thinking on it.

You don't have to write the story in 3rd person unless you want to. Can be done in first person easily enough, though to be honest I think it would work better in her perspective, guys tend to wear their thoughts on their sleeves so to speak so wouldn't have any what the heck moments when she says yes.

Oh yeah snoopy 18 year olds do listen to their parents, I met one once, about 15 years ago. He listened for an amazing 5 minutes.

 

[sirhugs]

but ya gotta love when snoops uses terms like 'telepathic' and 'delicious'.

 

[JRaven]

Now, now. No thievery.
Naturist is looking for ideas to help on her story. So of course, she goes to the idea factory.

If Dad and this lady are thinking about moving in together, I'm guessing that the son and the daughter already know about them dating. I would think Dad has by now taken son over to the womens' place for a birthday party or something. Maybe it's the daughter's birthday and the son and the daughter find out for the first time that their parents are dating. Of course, she's invited all her cool friends from school and the son feels out of his league. They're polite to him, but not much else. Maybe one of her male friends is also a friend of the son's and is included on things. But it's clear he's an outsider.

Another time, Dad takes the mom out for dinner and they bring the kids. Without her friends around, Son goes out of his way to be especially the gentleman. He wants to make it look like they're all double dating. And, she's appreciative of the attention and learns more about the son than she sees in school.

I think that as parents, they would be somewhat concerned about how their kids felt about their relationship. That should get a more than a casual mention in the story.

There are plenty of opportunities to write about before they get to the naturist part. And it's those opportunites that will develope the characters.

Jenny

 

[Naturist]

Thanks for all the ideas. I'm thinking right now about making it from her perspective... she's been raised a nudist and therefore, raised with the idea that physical attractiveness is less important than personality.

Right now, I have a picture in my mind that she's bisexual, but mostly into guys. Unfortunately, the guys in her high school are the creepy types were are more interested in telling other guys they've actually gotten laid instead of appreciating the girl they're having sex with. Thus, she seeks comfort with her best friend, a girl who accepts her for what she is and can keep a secret.

The girl finds out out that her unattractive, maybe soon to be step-brother, is a very nice guy despite his looks. As she learns more about him a person, she understands that even the unattractive are sexual beings, too. Even with her nudist upbringing, she still has to contend with her ideas about what sexual attractiveness means.

Interesting?

 

[sirhugs]

Thanks for all the ideas. I'm thinking right now about making it from her perspective... she's been raised a nudist and therefore, raised with the idea that physical attractiveness is less important than personality.

Right now, I have a picture in my mind that she's bisexual, but mostly into guys. Unfortunately, the guys in her high school are the creepy types were are more interested in telling other guys they've actually gotten laid instead of appreciating the girl they're having sex with. Thus, she seeks comfort with her best friend, a girl who accepts her for what she is and can keep a secret.

The girl finds out out that her unattractive, maybe soon to be step-brother, is a very nice guy despite his looks. As she learns more about him a person, she understands that even the unattractive are sexual beings, too. Even with her nudist upbringing, she still has to contend with her ideas about what sexual attractiveness means.

Interesting?

though quite different from the first post, it is equally intriguing.

 

[JRaven]

Okay, Naturist. Enough talking about it. Start writing! I wanna read!! I wanna read!!

I agree with Sirhugs. (and that's fairly easy to do...)
The first post is a bit different than the last. But it does sound like you've got everything fleshed out. Just be sure to reply to this thread once again when you've finished.

Luvya!
Jenny

 

[sirhugs]

it would take deft writing to keep continuity, but there is potential here for both viewpoints, perhaps as seperate overlapping chapters?

 

[Naturist]

Okay, Naturist. Enough talking about it. Start writing! I wanna read!! I wanna read!!

I agree with Sirhugs. (and that's fairly easy to do...)
The first post is a bit different than the last. But it does sound like you've got everything fleshed out. Just be sure to reply to this thread once again when you've finished.

Luvya!
Jenny

Okay, okay, I'm ready to start writing. Have to find a good editor, first... funny, I can edit other people's stuff but have trouble with my own.