any good ?

[arthurjohn]

I
Ican
Icant
Icantremermber
Icantrememberthe
Icantrememberthetaste
Icantrememberthetasteof
Icantrememberthetasteofyou
Icantrememberthetasteofyour
Icantrememberthetasteofyoursweet
Icantrememberthetasteofyoursweetsoul
I
Ican


arthurjohn

 

[Elda Furry]

If you seriously want feedback...

Honestly, it hurt my eyes reading it, and it's not very pleasant to the ears.
Basically, your poem is "I can't remember the taste of your sweet soul." Who am I to say it's not poetry? But if you want your poem to read this way then you need to, at least, be consistent and structure it better:

I
Ican
Icant
Icantremember
Icantrememberthe
Icantrememberthetaste
Icantrememberthetasteof
Icantrememberthetasteofyou
Icantrememberthetasteofyour
Icantrememberthetasteofyoursweet
Icantrememberthetasteofyoursweetsoul
Icant
Ican
I

Or make your poem take on this shape:

I
Ican
Icant
Icantremember
Icantrememberthe
Icantrememberthetaste
Icantrememberthetasteof
Icantrememberthetasteofyou
Icantrememberthetasteofyour
Icantrememberthetasteofyoursweet
Icantrememberthetasteofyoursweetsoul
Icantrememberthetasteofyoursweet
Icantrememberthetasteofyour
Icantrememberthetasteofyou
Icantrememberthetasteof
Icantrememberthetaste
Icantrememberthe
Icantremember
Icant
Ican
I

If you structure it the way I have it above then it's more visually interesting.

 

[MyOpinion]

mmni

 

[Elda Furry]

construction

Something else interesting that can be done with this poem: D cup poetry.

 

[Elda Furry]

By the way, arthurjohn, no fun is being poked at your poetry. I'm simply illustrating some unique shapes your poem can achieve.