An incest story with aspects of the War on Terror incorporated in it... ok or wrong?

[TheCaptain]

Okay, here's the idea I'm gettin, since my laptop is currently out of action and the half-dozen stories I was working on before have to be put on the backburner, for the time being at least...

A uni-age guy looses his father and brother in the World Trade Centre attack on 9/11. He is naturally devestated, feels the need to join the Army and train up in the defence of his nation. When US forces are deployed to Afghanistan in Operation Enduring Freedom, he is sent in with the rest of his Marine Division.

The main character does his bit for his country, even getting the Silver Star when he holds out against a Taliban/Al Qaeda assault on his position, with two of his fellow soldiers wounded and cut off from support for four hours.

When he returns home, the man's mother and sister are so glad to see that he is okay, though he has suffered a bullet wound to the left kneecap and has a slight limp because of it, that they burst into tears at the airport and hug him together over and over again.

Their passions begin to build as they see that he has been turned into a quiet, self-confident gentleman by his time in the service and, despite the fact that both women are related to him by blood, they begin to fall in love with the handsome young man...

I guess from there it sort of follows the usual incest plot, though I hope to make it a bit spicy and interesting to get the good ratings!

But here are the concerns I have:

Is it wrong to base an incest story sort-of round the War on Terror? (ie the fact that father and brother died in the World Trade Centre attacks, and that the main character fights in Afghanistan)

Does it take anything away from the story, or make me seem preachy, if I express to the readers in the story that the main character (and through him, myself) think war is inherently bad, and people suffer on all sides of a conflict, but sometimes it is a necessary way to secure a safe, secure world?

Okay then, thanks for reading, y'all

Ciao

Capt

 

[TheCaptain]

On revision...

I'll probably have to make the main char already in the Marines before 9/11, for the sake of the story's timeline (they went into Afghanistan pretty quick afterwards).

But that has little to do with anything, just a bit of technical for the story itself... please, post with your thoughts on the subject

Regards

Capt

 

[flawed_ethics]

I don't think there would be a problem with that. It's just my opinion, but current events are fair game. I would expect flack about whether the marine's actions were correctly handled (from what weapons were used to how they went about this fictional skirmish to the point where he gets wounded). People get picky.

Personally, I'm more hung up that mom and sis fall for him so fast. The both of them, no less. I have my own thoughts on how this could work out, but your story seems pretty well laid out, so I won't contaminate it with my thoughts.

As long as the story is solid and the flow from wartime action to bedroom action is smooth, it shouldn't receive any flack. You probably will receive some bashies in feedback or the public comments, but the average person should see such attacks as unwarrented.

Just my opinion.

 

[snooper]

No subject or scenario should be taboo as a background to writing.

As to acceptability of certain aspects of real life here on Lit, that is a different question. I don't see them objecting to this, but I could be wrong.

 

[silversword]

I agree there is no reason not to use it as a background. As long as you leave the charaters totally fictitious then go for it.

 

[sirhugs]

I would have preferred a third option.

I think a story focussed on the tragedy ( eg : desparation sex in a stairwell of the Tower) would be wrong, but something invoving say an undercover fbi operative forced to decide whether to pull a train in an Al Quaeda camp might be a nice twist.

 

[JRaven]

The first would still work

A lot of guys (and gals) that joined the military in the wake of 9/11, ended up in Iraq. It could add some "unintended consequences" to the story.

 

[silverwhisper]

given your description of how you plan to tell this story, i think that it's OK. it doesn't IMHO appear to disparage. when you come right down to it, the fact that 9/11 is even involved is practically incidental: the father & brother could have died in any other tragic circumstances.

that however begs a question: why make it about 9/11? what you've described carries no specifics that absolutely require that association. i mean, hey, it's your story, tell it how you want, but when you incorporate an element as powerful as that, i would have expected to see some kind of link.

ed

 

[TheCaptain]

given your description of how you plan to tell this story, i think that it's OK. it doesn't IMHO appear to disparage. when you come right down to it, the fact that 9/11 is even involved is practically incidental: the father & brother could have died in any other tragic circumstances.

that however begs a question: why make it about 9/11? what you've described carries no specifics that absolutely require that association. i mean, hey, it's your story, tell it how you want, but when you incorporate an element as powerful as that, i would have expected to see some kind of link.

ed

I dont really know why it had to be 9/11 - I guess I was looking at putting the story in a somewhat current to near-current environment, so I could write about it easier. I was thinking quite a bit about the ANZACs, actually (dont know if anybody but Aussies and Kiwis know bout them, but they were a few Australian/New Zealand divisions chucked together in WWI and thrown against a very tough, well positioned Turkish Army force at Galipoli).

That just got me thinkin that war was shit and I wanted to write something about it. My first thoughts was just to write a bit of a wartime story, no sex but about the men and the missions they fought. But then I was thinking that maybe I could incorporate a bit of the current War on Terror (a war without declaration, which seems to be the new way of things nowadays) into an incest story, to make it a timely tale of taboo love and passion based around somewhat fresh events, in EVERYONE'S minds.

BTW this is, at least in my opinion, an evolution on the idea of my World War II story, in which a soldier and a couple of noncombatants were stranded on a deserted island in the pacific (a post I set up here a while back). That idea has died along with the laptop, all my work is on there and its impossible for me to continue without my mainstay computer. But that one was getting HUGE - probably too large and complicated to make it a good piece of erotica.

Thanks for help, ppls

Capt

 

[TheCaptain]

I would have preferred a third option.

I think a story focussed on the tragedy ( eg : desparation sex in a stairwell of the Tower) would be wrong, but something invoving say an undercover fbi operative forced to decide whether to pull a train in an Al Quaeda camp might be a nice twist.

Look I think even I would have realized focusing in on the tragedy would have been wrong, and I've got a brain the size of a peanut thanks to excessive boozing and whackin off

"Forced to decide whether to pull a train in an Al Quaeda camp"? Huh? What ARE you trying to say here, my dear Sir? I do not compute!!!

Capt

 

[Patience_Bryce]

I've written two stories based on 9/11. One which is posted on Literotica.
They are just short incest themed stories I wrote the following month. I wasn't sure how either would be received but they have turned out to be popular.
On another site I also have written one with regards to a 'daddy' going off to War in Iraq. That has also been very popular. That story was written for someone very special to me that has gone to war in Iraq and is still there.. I sent it to him and he loved it.

Read Coping : Mother helps firefighter son cope with tragedy...

 

[JamesSD]

Go for it

In this case as long as the characters are respectful of the memories of those who died I don't see any reason not ot write the story as you drafted it. Avoid being too political and you may want to avoid graphic descriptions of the events of 9/11. All your readers will remember them pretty vividly anyways.

I'm not big into incest stories but widow/widower-child is perhaps the most interesting thematically I can think of. Many people bear at least a passing resemblence to a younger version of their parent, so it could stand to reason that the mother would have an attraction. The challenge is to then execute it in a sexy yet respectful manner.

Best of luck!