An idea that popped in my head

[YaoiHuntressE]

As the title says, this story idea popped into my head that I wanted to share...

Neil always felt like he was a screw-up. He was clumbsy, stuggled in school, so he created a class jokster persona to get people to like him. While it worked, he wasn't happy because no one took him seriously and his "friends" saw him as the goofy sidekick they took advantage of. Then one day he gets a letter from a mysterious admirer who sympathies with him and professes to love Neil for who he is.

The admirer's letters keep Neil's spirits up, until he gets one where his admirer will come to claim him on his 18th birthday which happens to be the day he got the letter.

Any ideas, comments, suggestions? I don't really want to turn this into some sadistic rape story, though dark elements are perfectly fine. (I was thinking of making it gay male or have a slight supernatural element, though I'm not a 100% married to either one.)

 

[sunandshadow]

I'm in favor of happy stories myself, and gay male with some kind of fantasy element would be my preference. But anyway I was trying to think what kind of person would be the soulmate of a class clown type. Soulmates are usually either the birds of a feather type (another joker, perhaps a trickster god?) or the opposites attract type (someone who's too serious or sad, needs to be cheered up by the jokes? Someone really long-lived and/or powerful, like a vampire or a nobleman? A dragon or shapeshifter?)

Then there's the question of how the admirer noticed Neil and why they only sent letters and never met him in person, and how they know Neil will be attracted to them. Or have they met him in person, he just didn't know it? That's why this idea caught my attention, because I've been playing with a "secret admirer letter" story idea myself (although the romantic object character is quite different).

I haven't really hit upon a good motivation for the secret admirer letters though. Extreme shyness makes sense, but I don't want to write a really shy character. If the romantic object character has already rejected the admirer in person due to some prejudice or preconceived notion makes sense, but probably wouldn't work with your romantic object character. I'm playing with the idea that the admirer can take any form and doesn't want to identify himself to his crush until he has figured out what form which would be totally appealing to them - but that would be much easier to figure out by befriending the ROC in one form to find out what they considered attractive then appearing to them in that form, what would be the point of the letters? Anyway do you have any ideas about what would be a good motivation for a secret admirer?

 

[YaoiHuntressE]

Then there's the question of how the admirer noticed Neil and why they only sent letters and never met him in person, and how they know Neil will be attracted to them. Or have they met him in person, he just didn't know it? That's why this idea caught my attention, because I've been playing with a "secret admirer letter" story idea myself (although the romantic object character is quite different). Anyway do you have any ideas about what would be a good motivation for a secret admirer?

Maybe the secret admirer wishes to protect his own identity and\or wanted to wait until Neil was legal. As for getting information and the letters into his ROC's locker, there was probably a second person (either mortal or mystic) helping the admirer out.

A really wrong part of me thought of making the admirer the estranged father Neil never knew existed (his mom slept around a lot and doesn't know who the father is).

 

[Fantasies_only]

Soulmates are usually either the birds of a feather type (another joker, perhaps a trickster god?) or the opposites attract type (someone who's too serious or sad, needs to be cheered up by the jokes? Someone really long-lived and/or powerful, like a vampire or a nobleman? A dragon or shapeshifter?)

There's also the "been there, done that" type.
Maybe an uneducated college drop out (the bad boy type and/or Goth) could be his thing.
The concept has worked with many straight women before.

Two things come to mind as how he noticed him.

The bad boy:
He was driving by the school on his motorcycle after school let out and saw the boys all "playing together" (group masturbation).

He heard people talking and laughing around the corner and checked it out.
You can take it from there.

Goth:
Joking with friends about the kind of people in a new club that just opened, Neil and friends check it out.

While waiting in line, this strange guy comes out of the club completely waisted.
In a drunken haze, he hears voices and locks eyes with Neil before he vomits and passes out.

 

[YaoiHuntressE]

There's also the "been there, done that" type.
Maybe an uneducated college drop out (the bad boy type and/or Goth) could be his thing.
The concept has worked with many straight women before.
.

*snip* I might consider it.

 

[Fantazmaster]

I guess this one sort of rings autobiographical in way as I was always the class clown in high school,which I guess was a result of a childhood chronic illness that in later years caused me to lag my peers in physical development.I did indeed get a letter from a female secret admirer,several of them in fact,These multiple letters became more daring as the school year evolved with her detailing some pretty elaborate ideas on her part regarding various connubial activities and positions thereof.It was especially noteworthy to me that she a real propensity towards making love atop various items of furniture,especially such furniture as dressers and chest of drawers and these freshly waxed with lemon
enhanced furniture polish to put a finer point on things I suppose.

Having spent a lot of time in various hospitals as a little tyke,I somehow knew all this was going to turn out negatively ,as I had by that time in life seen far too many miracles of recovery slip away to tragic ends.Much like the fellow lost in the desert who follows what he thinks is seagulls that wll lead him out of the desert,only later to find these birds are vultures,who in the end wind up feasting on his remains in the desert,vultures of course being well known to fly miles long circles.That or the tap dancer from Philadelphia beset with severe allergies who finally is able to retire to Arizona,only to find he has a fatal allergy to tumbleweed.
Anyhow a letter stuck in my locker one fine spring day in April indicated she would meet me at a forthcoming school dance and reveal who she was to me.
Well the days ticked by and I prepared to attend the dance looking foward
to finally seeing who this female was with these lemon oil inspired dalliances running through her head so vividly.
At last the night of the dance arrived and I was nervous to say the least with a blend of anticipation and dread running through my mind.About the third song she stepped up and revealed herself to me and I was stunned!She was that tall honey blonde I had noted many times as her PE class shared the gym with my PE class.She quite simply had a body that dreams were made of .The next number started,a slow tune and I asked her to dance and she assented.
Holding her closely I noticed her stomach was somewhat extended outwards,hidden from apparent view by her rather prominent bust.At that point she revealed the sort of news I knew had to be operative here.
"I dont know how to tell you this," she said "But I got so horny writing and thinking about us on the furniture,so I started visiting Sternman's ( a local furniture store) and struck up a friendship with the owners son.He started letting me come down there at night with him.I hate to tell you but I am almost 4 months pregnant with his child." Sje was puzzled as I left the dance at that point mumbling about vultures and tumbleweed.

 

[YaoiHuntressE]

I"I dont know how to tell you this," she said "But I got so horny writing and thinking about us on the furniture,so I started visiting Sternman's ( a local furniture store) and struck up a friendship with the owners son.He started letting me come down there at night with him.I hate to tell you but I am almost 4 months pregnant with his child." Sje was puzzled as I left the dance at that point mumbling about vultures and tumbleweed.

Damn, that's harsh. Sorry you had to go through with that.

 

[Fantazmaster]

I appreciate the kind thoughts,YaoiHuntressE.Harsh yes it was,but the lesson I had learned during my years of childhood illness was to not be overly expectant of a favorable outcome here.Granted that is perhaps a perspective found more commonly among far more mature adults,I guess my seeing so many other children have succesful recoveries only to die within days of returning home,gave me a type of wisdom beyond my teenage years.There again,notice that even the most experienced expert skydiver brings along a spare parachute

Damn, that's harsh. Sorry you had to go through with that.

 

[YaoiHuntressE]

I appreciate the kind thoughts,YaoiHuntressE.Harsh yes it was,but the lesson I had learned during my years of childhood illness was to not be overly expectant of a favorable outcome here.Granted that is perhaps a perspective found more commonly among far more mature adults,I guess my seeing so many other children have succesful recoveries only to die within days of returning home,gave me a type of wisdom beyond my teenage years.There again,notice that even the most experienced expert skydiver brings along a spare parachute

I see. I hope things are going better for you.

 

[YaoiHuntressE]

Update

I think I've pretty much got it together. I think I'm going to go with the slight fairy tale/fantasy feel in a modern setting. You remember those stories where a magical being would test a random mortal and reward the kind\honest ones while punishing the cruel ones? Neal happens to be the lucky target when he helps an elderly homeless man who was beaten and left for dead. Little does he know that the old man was really a fae noble looking for a suitable mate and starts watching over Neal and sends him those letters.

The thing is that while the noble's feelings are for real, he's not human and like the fae in the legends, can be unpredictable (for lack of a better term.) Thus uses some fairly devious means to get Neal to come with him.

 

[JRaven]

Hmm...

I guess I kind of took it completely different.

It's his mother of course!

Or, it's a girl he's known since grade school. The one that had the 'cooties' that nobody liked. She knew of his awkwardness because he didn't become the class clown until high school. His 18th birthday just happened to be right after graduation, she wanted to wait until then so that nobody at school would say anything about them.

Or, it's a group of cheerleaders that decide to have a little fun with him. It culminates in a non-consent reverse gang bang.

Jenny

 

[JRaven]

PS: Don't get me wrong.

Yaoi's take sounds like it would be a lot more enjoyable read than any of my thoughts.

 

[YaoiHuntressE]

JRaven: Those are pretty interesting ideas so thanks for sharing them, but I think I'll stick with my idea.