American reader for Hallowe'en romance?

Kumquatqueen

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The story is 17k words, and a heterosexual Romance (which I've never done before).

One of the characters is an American in England for the first time. I've had a very helpful person work through the general premise and details of what he would and wouldn't be surprised by in London, but it would be great if an American could double-check the words I've made the guy say, and point out any British phrases that the average American Lit reader would be confused by.

A few comments on the pacing would be appreciated but I'm not looking for detailed editing.

Many thanks.
 
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