Am I a freak, and does this mean I'm cool?

[Guest]

I keep trying to read this story because someone had made the effort to write this stuff for over several pages.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=139910

The story involves silicone tited prostituting mum being raped by her son, as far as I'm aware. I say this because I can't go past the first page as it keeps cracking me up.

Is this a fantastically brilliant comedy writing or a sick author writing?

 

[Guest]

All right, folks.

Since I made the initial post making the general public aware what's happening on the linked story, it aquired the coveted 'H' mark!

The author must be doing somethig right!

I'm in the opinion that the author is some sort of comic genius!

Or, the general public is as mad as the world seems to be!

 

[Guest]

Oh, and I'm struggling to stifle giggling on the page two!

 

[dr_mabeuse]

Hey, I tried to read it, but I couldn't get past that dialogue business. All that tryin' and doin' and fuckin' just got to me after a while.

---dr.M.

 

[jon_jones]

I'm usually a fan of mother/son incest, (I know, I know, I'm going to hell) but I couldn't finish this story, with lines like

“That’s it, my sexy mother,” I groan in a pant, “Drink all my cum!”

and

“That’s because, my dear sweet mother,” I answer sitting up, “I can be the best for you.”

Even if a guy is fucking his prositute mother, I just can't see him talking like that. One of the major problems on Lit is that people can't write realistic dialogue. Having said that, if people here could write realistic dialogue, they'd be selling their stories, not posting them here.

By the way Chilled Vodka, where can I see a larger pic of yoru avatar? It's really hot, I'd like to know.

Jon
x

 

[Guest]

I read the story.

To each their own.

BTW....
that AV is used and was used originally and still is used by KillerMuffin....

if you don't know who she is I might suggest finding out.

 

[Guest]

Well, I read the story too, though I skipped over some of it. Personally, I think that author is in serious need of an editor. There were tense changes and verb non-agreement all over the place.

And what was with all the "A quivering breast .." did this and "A stiff cock.." did that? Not to mention referring to his mother as the parent. All of that stuff just about drove me absolutely nuts.

It has the potential to be a decent story (well... as decent as Incest can be, I guess), but not without some serious editing.

 

[DarkLit]

Well, this story is definitely... a story written by someone, isn't it? At least there aren't too many glaring spelling errors.

 

[Nicola_Italia1]

I SO agree with Chilled. That dialogue was so unrealistic and very funny.

I loved those lines he/she used.

One of the things I pride myself on is good dialogue.

Keep up the writing!!

Cheers!


Nicola

 

[SliNgSh0t]

son/mom, grammatical farce

I'm not into son-mom incest, rather I treat every whore as if she was that bitch down the hall. And none of the mommy nicety language either. What little I grunt out bangin these bitches is inevitably "Who's your daddy now bitch? That's it. Papi's home. Who's your daddy now, bitch, huh?" If you're into incest, it's cool, I want set my wife up with multiple partners while I watch secretly. But you must be able to use the English language properly. But when daddy's cooking dinner, some slang may creep in.