Alright, first story... kick my ass.

[Wolf of Mibu 69]

Please let me know what you think. I'm looking for actual suggestions here, pointers really, not just an out of ten rating. Heh. Link's in my sig.

 

[NoJo]

Like a lot of stuff here, it's not a story, but a description of sex. There was no characterization, and becasue of this, it didn't engage me, I'm afraid.

 

[Wolf of Mibu 69]

Understood. There are many such "descriptions of sex" on Lit though, and this was a first attempt at it. Women seem to like the story more than men though, for some reason.

I do indeed plan to write some "stories" later on, but as you know, character development takes a while, and for me personally at least, they don't just pop out of nowhere.

Thanks for taking the time to read the story though.