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[Cathoholic]

like a split fig, somehow
yet more rich
where i would scavenge seeds
but instead lick

one small hard one, wedged
in fundamental crevasse
a variant of ice plant, not honeyed
for dull and overeager ants

but succulent and plump
i do not bite i flick
and tease the purple flower
with my more purpled tip

 

[Angeline]

like a split fig, somehow
yet more rich
where i would scavenge seeds
but instead lick

one small hard one, wedged
in fundamental crevasse
a variant of ice plant, not honeyed
for dull and overeager ants

but succulent and plump
i do not bite i flick
and tease the purple flower
with my more purpled tip

Well written and oh so sensual. Got more?

 

[Epmd607]

like a split fig, somehow
yet more rich
where i would scavenge seeds
but instead lick

one small hard one, wedged
in fundamental crevasse
a variant of ice plant, not honeyed
for dull and overeager ants

but succulent and plump
i do not bite i flick
and tease the purple flower
with my more purpled tip

Yes, good poem. How come in the second stanza you drop the partial rhymes? Split, Rich, Lick worked well together.

 

[Cathoholic]

Well written and oh so sensual. Got more?

yes but not sensual


how easily all adjust
to a dead snail
little teacup shards
of shell

and what if the boot
that crushed that whorl
read gun magazines
in jail?

 

[Cathoholic]

Yes, good poem. How come in the second stanza you drop the partial rhymes? Split, Rich, Lick worked well together.

by stanza:

rich/lick

crevasse/eager ants

flick/tip

no perfect rhymes, but assonance

 

[Epmd607]

by stanza:

crevasse/eager ants

See, I would of found the rhyme in crevasse/eager aunts.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

yes but not sensual


how easily all adjust
to a dead snail
little teacup shards
of shell

and what if the boot
that crushed that whorl
read gun magazines
in jail?

Woah! very thought provoking! I won't stand on them though I chuck them over next doors fence

 

[Cathoholic]

love

her breath smelled of cigarettes
i could no longer smoke so i
kissed her other lips

and later, fascinated, watched
the flex of lopsided tattoo
running over the back of her hips



still, my fingers curled
when i stroked her long flank
as if they sheltered a marlboro

from some sudden spit of wind
and my finish was not right
for these lungs sucked only air

 

[UnderYourSpell]

Which begs the question ........ Do you smoke after intercourse? I don't know I've never looked

 

[Cathoholic]

Which begs the question ........ Do you smoke after intercourse? I don't know I've never looked

i dont smoke anymore, which is what the poem is about

 

[UnderYourSpell]

i dont smoke anymore, which is what the poem is about

It was a joke which is not half as funny if I have to explain it but here goes ...... Doing sex at a great speed causes friction hence alluding to smoke sooooooooo do you smoke after? looks down at parts that might be afflicted ..... I don't know I've never looked