After the first story

[Sessa]

I just posted my first story on this sit a couple of weeks ago (or may be a month by now but still). I've been trying to write another story, but I can't seem to get started.

I would like to continue on with the story with the same three characters.

May be i'm just having something like writters block.

Any tips? hints? anything?

 

[Just_John1]

Welcome

and congrats on having your first story posted! I find one of two things, I either have to be in a certain mood to write a story, and typically in the same mood as I was when I wrote the first chapter in order to write the second chapter, which is even harder. I find that if I'm trying to force a second chapter it's mcuh harder to get started than if I just start writing on what ever strikes my fancy at the time.

JJ1

 

[Colleen Thomas]

A link to your story would be helpful, it's hard to give advice totally in the dark

Generally, if you are doing a second part let your character's personalities and experiences from part one carry you inot the meat of part two.

-Colly

 

[Sessa]

Link? Yes of course. That never crossed my mind

http://www.literotica.com:81/stories/showstory.php?id=127149

The mood i was in at the time - I'm a bisexual female and i was trying to express my feelings and needs. I found that after writting the story and getting together with my new boyfriend, that the part of me that wants to be with a female is quite content to do nothing at the moment. May be this is the problem?

 

[Boxlicker101]

I just posted my first story on this sit a couple of weeks ago (or may be a month by now but still). I've been trying to write another story, but I can't seem to get started.

I would like to continue on with the story with the same three characters.

May be i'm just having something like writters block.

Any tips? hints? anything?

Hi, Sessa.
Congrats on getting posted. It is quite a thrill, something, I suppose, like seeing your work in print. If you are writing separate chapters of one story, it is sometimes a problem. If you are writing a series of stories with the same characters, it is easier because you already have the personalities established but you can go on to other things.

 

[Boxlicker101]

Link? Yes of course. That never crossed my mind

http://www.literotica.com:81/stories/showstory.php?id=127149

The mood i was in at the time - I'm a bisexual female and i was trying to express my feelings and needs. I found that after writting the story and getting together with my new boyfriend, that the part of me that wants to be with a female is quite content to do nothing at the moment. May be this is the problem?

I read the story and left a PC. You could write a new story about a threesome with most of the action being straight.

 

[Sessa]

I really don't want Jasmine and Lisa to become stright girls, but the threesome is deffentially an idea.

Might take some thought on how to make the 3sum center around Matt since i don't think i touched on him enough.

 

[TexasShyGuy]

I just posted my first story on this sit a couple of weeks ago (or may be a month by now but still). I've been trying to write another story, but I can't seem to get started.

I would like to continue on with the story with the same three characters.

May be i'm just having something like writters block.

Any tips? hints? anything?

Maybe those three characters don't have any more story to tell. Try writing something else and maybe just maybe you first characters will come up with another story.

 

[wishfulthinking]

Hi Sessa, I have to say that I have found doing a follow on chapter just keeps getting harder and harder with each additional chapter because you have to stay true to your characters and true to yourself while not losing sight of the plot - if that makes any sense.

Sometimes the story is just burning to be told, othertimes I have to write a little and come back a week later. I also find it great to write another story in the meantime before getting back to the next chapter as it keeps you fresh and doesn't make you want to throw the story into the trash with frustration (as much!).

Goodluck!

 

[gauchecritic]

Eyup Sess, and welcome to the zoo.

As you say in your biog, you really need people to help you with spelling. You also need someone to keep an eye on all the other technical stuff too. I think you'll find MSWord will help you a hell of a lot, when it underlines things in red or blue find out why. And always use the spell checker before you cut and paste. But this isn't the feedback forum.

I will say though that the story itself is pretty cool. So do other people, you don't get a red H for nothing.

I can see 2 very good places to go with your second installment. Either straight into the shower scene, or my preference, back to what happened three weeks ago. You made so much reference to that. I really need to know what happened before.

Keep writing.

Gauche

 

[Sessa]

Well, with these forums i don't check my spelling nearly enough before i post, because honnestly i can't be bothered.

But as for the story, i went over the story prolly a million times on my own. And i only use word to type up my stories, i don't write them up by hand. as for spel checking, i print out stories and check it there, i check it on screen and use the spell checker. And not just once. About a million times at every phase of writting the story.

I also contacted an editor from the website and he checked it over.

enough spell checking don't you think?

 

[whispering_surrender]

I don't really have any helpful advice to add to the ones already posted. (I've never done a serial, and don't really have any plans to.) But, welcome from me, and keep at it.

Whisp

 

[Guest]

Well, with these forums i don't check my spelling nearly enough before i post, because honnestly i can't be bothered.

But as for the story, i went over the story prolly a million times on my own. And i only use word to type up my stories, i don't write them up by hand. as for spel checking, i print out stories and check it there, i check it on screen and use the spell checker. And not just once. About a million times at every phase of writting the story.

I also contacted an editor from the website and he checked it over.

enough spell checking don't you think?

Hi Sessa, and welcome!

I've just read through your story, and it's pretty good, but could do with some tightening. You have some good, and interesting characters there, and I'd like to see them develop in future chapters.

As for your final question: "enough spell checking don't you think? " Well, I hate to be blunt, but obviously not.

A lot of spelling errors aren't actually picked up by Word, and underlined in red, this is because they are valid words, in the right context.

Here's a couple of examples from your story...

Jasmine smiled as she remember that day. "Remember" should be "remembered".

“His really nice and there seems to be a few sparks.” "His" should be "he's".

As somebody else has mentioned, you do a lot of jumping around with the tenses. In one paragraph you'll be telling the story in past tense, then the next in present tense.

This all probably sounds like I'm nit-picking, which I guess I am to a certain extent, but please don't get defensive on me; I am trying to be helpful, as I know everyone else here is.

You have good story there, and your writing shows talent, and a good potential, but please take on board what others say to you, and you can only improve.

We've all been through it, and continue to go through it. We can, and do, learn from each other here. Grasp that, with both hands, and look upon it as friendly advice, not harsh crtisism.

Also, I'd advise you find a different editor. Those things should've been picked up during the external edit, if not at any other time.

Good luck with the next chapter, I definitely think you should carry on with the series.

Lou

 

[Sessa]

Well i was meaning that i feel i have checked the story enough and so many times that i am sick and tired of going thru the story. The story is finished and completed in my books and I'm not asking advice on that story, mearly on continuing the story.

I welcome your advice, but please not on the spelling and gramma, i know you's are only trying to help, but it really bugs me.

 

[Guest]

Well i was meaning that i feel i have checked the story enough and so many times that i am sick and tired of going thru the story. The story is finished and completed in my books and I'm not asking advice on that story, mearly on continuing the story.

I welcome your advice, but please not on the spelling and gramma, i know you's are only trying to help, but it really bugs me.

Ok, cool. Apologies for that, sweetie.

I just looked over your first post, and I should've just commented on the question you asked.

In which case...

Go for it!

Write the shower scene, with Matt maybe joining them, but not being allowed to touch? They could tease him and taunt him, and get it on with each other, while he watched, up close. That would be incredibly hot.

Lou

 

[A7inchPhildo]

I won't ask who the editor was that is really not important. Writing a good story is a pleasure and posting a quality story is fun.

I like to make second and third stories dealing with the same characters myself. Some advice I like to follow, is I try to do a completely different story between chapters. It allows the next section to have a new perspective utilizing the same characters.

I find if I write part two immediately following sometimes I become bored and try to hurry the story just because it seems dauntingly long and more work than fun.

Clear the cob webs before trying to write part two will help with the block.

 

[gauchecritic]

Damn, I tried like hell not to sound like I was lecturing you Sess.

You are justly proud of your work and the fact that thousands of people will be reading it and getting worked up can only be a good thing.

I really have to say though (really trying hard not to lecture) I think you should not be so intent on 'writing properly'. Like a few authors that I really like (who don't write as much as they ought to) I think you'd really benefit from writing the story down in exactly the way you'd speak it.

But then it's you that got the H so you must be doing something right.

Gauche

 

[Sessa]

But then it's you that got the H so you must be doing something right.

what dose that mean?

 

[lucky-E-leven]

what dose that mean?

The little red square with a black H inside it, next to your story on your author page, means that it rates an average score of 4.5 or better after having been voted on at least ten times. It's a good thing and meant to be a compliment.

~lucky

 

[Sessa]

yey then