Lori_the_Hoosier
Dhampyre
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So, after nearly 8 years, and a lot of psyching myself up, I decided to toss my hat back in the ring and publish (eventually...) a story idea I've been thinking about for a while, based on and inspired by qhml1's version of 'Let Go', a story of a female CEO who fires her own husband, and tries to win him back. I've followed the basic story premise fairly faithfully, just played with the reasons and the aftermath of her actions but now I think I may have bitten off more than I can chew, especially in the way the story is paced the way I've written it.
I keep getting the feeling I've put too much in too soon and basically info-dumped the story, so I guess what I'm asking is for one of you guys to please take a look if possible, and comment and suggest where you think the story needs expansion, contraction, re-pacing, and what's missing and where in the story, and what is excess wordbrush and needs to be excised. I'm 23.3k words in and nowhere near finished, but it feels like I've painted myself into a corner a little, and I need some advice where to backtrack to and rewrite to get me out of it.
I'm too close to it, it all seems either just right or windy and wordy, depending on whether I've had a good or a bad day, so outside disinterested opinion would be much appreciated. Hubby refuses to look at it, he reckons he's happy in his marriage and he wants to stay that way, so other, unbiased adult opinion seems most appropriate; any takers? Some guidance, real opinion from actual writers, would be most appreciated.
I keep getting the feeling I've put too much in too soon and basically info-dumped the story, so I guess what I'm asking is for one of you guys to please take a look if possible, and comment and suggest where you think the story needs expansion, contraction, re-pacing, and what's missing and where in the story, and what is excess wordbrush and needs to be excised. I'm 23.3k words in and nowhere near finished, but it feels like I've painted myself into a corner a little, and I need some advice where to backtrack to and rewrite to get me out of it.
I'm too close to it, it all seems either just right or windy and wordy, depending on whether I've had a good or a bad day, so outside disinterested opinion would be much appreciated. Hubby refuses to look at it, he reckons he's happy in his marriage and he wants to stay that way, so other, unbiased adult opinion seems most appropriate; any takers? Some guidance, real opinion from actual writers, would be most appreciated.